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Kevin
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0 posted 01-13-2000 01:34 AM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kevin


Am I so cursed to see tomorrow
when others fail to look
just one day Id like to borrow
a page of their story book.

And after every word was read
id tear the page in spite
than lose myself inside my head
as thoughts begin to write.

So many pages  left undone
Im running out of ink.
who died and made me the one
to suffer as I think.
© Copyright 2000 Kevin Bednarz - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-13-2000 01:40 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

As usual, great wording and rhymes, and also very dark and almost bitter. I remember when I started, I couldn't seem to find a sense of humor in my writing, though I had plenty in real life. With such a smiley photo of you next to your poems, there's a sort of irony. I'm not knocking your work though; far from it. I am saying, though, feel free to spread out whenever, and if ever, you're ready. I'm excited to see what you could accomplish.

Mike
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2 posted 01-13-2000 01:43 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

All great thinkers suffer, Kevin. You'll get used to it!.....hehehehehe...but seriously, you are a very gifted writer, Kevin. And unfortunately, thinking is a prerequisite!  

 Denise

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3 posted 01-13-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for CrazyChick   Email CrazyChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CrazyChick

Great work
Michael
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4 posted 01-13-2000 01:45 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Oh, the curses of foresight.  What a life it would be to not have to "think".  Great poem, Kevin.  Just a side note...you're a much better thinker than you would be a lemming...LOL


Michael


Kevin
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5 posted 01-13-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kevin

whose to say im not a leming! hey guys
thanks for the replies but one of us should get to bed lol!

goodnight guys
Michael
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6 posted 01-13-2000 01:52 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

A lemming would never go to bed without being told, Kevin...

G'night.

Michael
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7 posted 01-13-2000 01:53 AM       View Profile for myslinky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for myslinky

This is a great poem.
I can relate to
thinking way too much into things
sometimes i get out of hand and lose sight of whats important.
Loved the poem.

Marge Tindal
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8 posted 01-13-2000 06:49 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kevin -

As usual ... you spin a good one.
Mystery ... intrigue ... just you.
Inside your head the stories,
inside your heart the ink.
~*Marge*~
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 01-13-2000 07:12 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Kevin...bitterness, yes, but tempered with wisdom, and wonderfully crafted. Very well written.

Dear LadyClaire
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understanding this
yes
 
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