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Broken Road

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Skyfyre
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0 posted 01-13-2000 12:11 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

The path of Life has borne a deviant tread
Without complaint, from these, my weary feet;
For often have I wandered, sorely lost,
Though pride would not allow relent.  The cost
Was paid in blood and tears, and yet, retreat
Poured poison in a heart already dead.

Oh jagged road, these many scars I bear
As testament to your uneven grain
Could each relay a tale of triumph earned,
Or, alternately, searing shame is burned
Into a painted memory of pain.
Of bitter vanity, this cloak I wear

To hide the self, beneath a careful shade
Of arrogance, a wall of seamless steel
That baffles e'en the most insistent eyes.
Reclusive soul begins to realize
The price it pays for learning not to feel:
By refuge walls a prisoner is made.

The road ahead is bleak; the broken stone
Reflects the heart in mocking parody.
The body begs surcease from curse'd quest,
But presses on – and hope avails no rest
To one whose eyes, though opened, cannot see
How, in the teeming throng, she stands alone.


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

© Copyright 2000 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Anne
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1 posted 01-13-2000 12:21 AM       View Profile for Anne   Email Anne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Anne

Very striking.  Excellent word and imagery choices.  GREAT poem!
Baby Blue
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2 posted 01-13-2000 12:26 AM       View Profile for Baby Blue   Email Baby Blue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Baby Blue

A touching poem, I am amazed that you put those words together so perfectly.  They are very deep and moving in some ways.  Good job, and I hope that I will have time to read your others.

Baby Blue

"He became what he hated,
But he loved what he became,
And he hated the fact that he loved it."


 
Denise
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3 posted 01-13-2000 12:26 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Skyfyre, once again your writing talent shines through! It is always a pleasure to read your poems! I love the way you use meter and rhyme so skillfully! Everything you write flows like a song!

 Denise

Michael
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4 posted 01-13-2000 01:35 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Your brilliance preceeds you, Kess.  Wonderful work...

"Reflects the heart in mocking parody"
great line.


Michael
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5 posted 01-13-2000 01:43 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

As carefully plotted and theatrically choreographed as a PJ Harvey song. And in case you were wondering, that's a compliment.  

Mike
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6 posted 01-13-2000 07:44 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Is this what you were working on? It's exceptional...of course... Now, you know it's crafted perfectly, so from now on when I comment on your work, I'm going to be looking at your content... How many times can I say "That's just great - you wrote it in perfect iambic pentameter!!"....LOL...

I like the third stanza best... Your use of metaphor, and personification really enhances the poem....  particularly the "wall of seamless steel"...

Nice one, Kess...
caroline
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7 posted 01-13-2000 01:53 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

I think, that of all your poetry I have read, (and I love all that I've read) that this is my favorite. Powerful and perfect.  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Mike
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8 posted 01-13-2000 02:21 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Not much more that can be added to the above.
Truly exceptional.
DreamEvil
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9 posted 01-13-2000 05:29 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

No trite words or echoes from me on this my friend. 'Tis excellent work, particularly the rhyme scheme.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


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10 posted 04-16-2005 05:12 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I relate to this so well right now
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11 posted 04-16-2005 06:01 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine


I do so enjoy reading these 'oldies'. This is a find worth reading again and again.

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12 posted 01-24-2006 11:55 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I agree with the Devine one, this is sure worth a bump - dark done well ~ you can't beat it!
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