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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 01-12-2000 11:46 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse



Trusted Trespass


Trusted
trespass,
enfeebled
fouling few.
Despoil
morning's child,
once ivory
innocence
she knew.
Ill vacancy,
noiseless night
becomes
her hue.
Now pardon
past her,
as she
inconveniences
you.



Dear LadyClaire


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1 posted 01-12-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This says it all, Claire! Very well written.

 Denise

Meadowmuse
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2 posted 01-13-2000 06:50 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Denise, thank you for reading and commenting...I appreciate the feedback.

Dear LadyClaire
Nan
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3 posted 01-13-2000 08:25 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I went back to read this twice.... Nice one...
Ted Reynolds
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4 posted 01-13-2000 08:29 AM       View Profile for Ted Reynolds   Email Ted Reynolds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ted Reynolds

Got it, second time through.  Good choice of sounds.  Well done.
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5 posted 01-13-2000 08:29 AM       View Profile for simplyYRREHS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for simplyYRREHS

oh Claire!
Caught me with the title...splendid writing!  Can be manipulated to mean a grand array of things...LOVE IT!
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6 posted 01-13-2000 08:47 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is wonderful Claire I like it
Michael
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7 posted 01-13-2000 08:55 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Great reading, Claire.  Powerful piece.

Michael
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8 posted 01-13-2000 08:56 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Wonderfully done.
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 01-13-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

You write about the terrible crime of sexual abuse in such a beautiful way, but still leaving the wrenching feelings of despair
Good work
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10 posted 01-13-2000 10:23 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Oh my...incredibly powerful. Magnificent piece of writing, Meadow.

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


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11 posted 01-13-2000 01:11 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

I have to addmit I had to read it twice
before i came to realize
Then still i was unsure what I just read
Now I know It is so sad
Well the style you write
Makes others think.....twice

Thank you for sharing such incredible work

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Andrew Scott
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12 posted 01-13-2000 02:45 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Harsh subject, handled well.  Like the style of presentation and writing.  Fine title as well. A solid piece all the way around.  I bow to you and yours.
LngJhnAg
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13 posted 01-13-2000 02:52 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Claire, this was so sophisticated in its presentation.  The message begged to come out, but the writing was so tight that I had to really think about what I was reading.  I loved the genious behind this fine piece of poetry.  So powerful and direct!
Martie
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14 posted 01-13-2000 04:28 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

You pack so much into this space of words--emotional and powerful.  Well done!
Meadowmuse
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15 posted 01-13-2000 07:33 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Thanks, everyone, for your kindhearted responses. I'm glad you found something to like about this poem.

Dear LadyClaire

Grandma Jo
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Gotta admit that I too read it twice. Very nice piece, very well done!  
Meadowmuse
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Thank you, Grandma Jo, for taking the time to read, and respond so favorably.

Dear LadyClaire


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cool write
 
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