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blueyz75
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0 posted 01-12-2000 09:14 PM       View Profile for blueyz75   Email blueyz75   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit blueyz75's Home Page   View IP for blueyz75


Control

Empty abyss swallowed my soul,
that was the day I lost all control.
You walked in my life so cocky,
I didn't know the road ahead was rocky.
Given a choice I'd not choose another,
even if I had to put up with your brother.
He kept secrets that tore us apart,
I knew I loved you from the start.
I didn't foresee where we would go,
we had such a long row to ho.
To walk along the path with you,
that is all that I wanted to do.
You were my heaven on earth,
your love was like my second birth.
Making me feel alive,
even now our love will survive.
In my heart I carry your soul,
your the man who shot my control.

Kelly Maria Kosa
Wednesday, January 12, 2000
All rights reserved

This is my first post in this area, I don't think it fits real well in the spiritual room.

Kelly


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

© Copyright 2000 Kelly M. Kosa - All Rights Reserved
Majestic
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1 posted 01-12-2000 09:28 PM       View Profile for Majestic   Email Majestic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majestic

if ever a poem described love's ups and downs..this is it...nice poem..
blueyz75
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2 posted 01-12-2000 09:45 PM       View Profile for blueyz75   Email blueyz75   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blueyz75's Home Page   View IP for blueyz75

Well right now, foregoing a minor miracle, it's been buried at the lowest low.  Not much I can do about it.

Kelly


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

Sally S.
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3 posted 01-13-2000 09:10 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

I know well those feelings, dear.
Welcome to Open!  I was hoping you'd pop in, Kelly.  See what a bit of persuading can do? ~giggle~  Welcome, welcome!  
Denise
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4 posted 01-13-2000 10:29 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Nice poem, Kelly! Sometimes things are out of our control, huh? But miracles do happen!

 Denise

blueyz75
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5 posted 01-15-2000 02:09 PM       View Profile for blueyz75   Email blueyz75   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blueyz75's Home Page   View IP for blueyz75

It got a little lost in.  It got busy.  Makes it so you can't see all that you want to see!  You guys are going to have to slow down and not be so creative!  or spread yourselves out!

Kelly


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

Nan
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6 posted 01-15-2000 02:24 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I like the line about love feeling "like a second birth"... good one, Kel...
blueyz75
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7 posted 01-17-2000 05:30 PM       View Profile for blueyz75   Email blueyz75   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blueyz75's Home Page   View IP for blueyz75

Thanks everyone....this will probably get lost in here somewhere!  

and OH, I went thru his town the other day but didn't stop.  To chicken!

Kel


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

devina
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8 posted 01-17-2000 05:33 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Heaven on Earth...what a picture you paint!!! I could feel you on this one!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
RainbowGirl
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9 posted 01-17-2000 05:41 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Sweetheart: I don't think antibiotics are gonna fix this one, but you can...you have the remedy...

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

Justbleu
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10 posted 01-17-2000 09:25 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I liked this cuz....I can completely relate to a few trying times in my life....guys seem to always be able to shoot our control!! LOL!! Thanks!!

Take Care
Bridgette
blueyz75
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11 posted 01-18-2000 03:47 PM       View Profile for blueyz75   Email blueyz75   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blueyz75's Home Page   View IP for blueyz75

I'm very flattered guys!  Thanks for all the responses.

and Rainbow, I tried everything within my power the first time to do it all right, and nothing worked.  I lost!  In the process my heart broke.  That I haven't been able to fix yet, just try to forget most days and keep going.  I'm to scared to pick up the phone!

Kelly


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 01-18-2000 05:22 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

"your the man who shot my control"
amazing how guickly that can be shot sometimes. You've expressed your emotions very clearly in this one  
Echo Rhayne
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Kelly, I think Marge has some band-aids you can use for your broken heart    *hugs*
Liked the poem, I can relate

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


blueyz75
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14 posted 01-19-2000 11:51 AM       View Profile for blueyz75   Email blueyz75   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blueyz75's Home Page   View IP for blueyz75

Uh bandaids?  I needed a full blown disaster control crew when it all intitially happened.  Bandaids wouldn't even have started to cover all the problems that happened then.  But that is in the past, and I'm here now, although be it alone, looking to the future.  
Kelly


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

Lost Dreamer
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15 posted 01-25-2000 10:16 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

You described your feelings very well with this poem, none of us knows what lies ahead in the future, you could be amazed. Hold your head up high and keep a positive outlook, the stars will sprinkle down upon you when your not looking.
d.schultz
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16 posted 01-25-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for d.schultz   Email d.schultz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for d.schultz

Wonderful Poem    My best advice for someone who has been down the same road... TIME... it does heal all  
Dark Angel
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17 posted 01-26-2000 12:36 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Kelly, I felt your emotions in this one, Well Done!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


tracie66
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18 posted 01-26-2000 02:39 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Dear Kelly
I know you feel alone right now, but yes time does eventually heel and a new love will come your way.
tracie
blueyz75
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19 posted 01-26-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for blueyz75   Email blueyz75   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blueyz75's Home Page   View IP for blueyz75

MMMM lets see, new love, still waiting.  And isn't three years enough time?  I am not intentionally turning men away..hell I'd have to find them first to do that!     And I absolutly refuse to search for love on the net!  hehehe  

Thanks guys!
kelly


 I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

Skyfyre
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20 posted 01-26-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

LOL -- yes, I know all too well how caring for someone can upend your control ... and I am a control freak, so you can imagine I really go off the deep end when it happens to me!  Talk about a study in extremes!  Marble to mush in three seconds flat -- LOL

Good stuff here, Kel -- glad you finally decided to peek in on the wolves' den that is Open ... LOL

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

One Who Understands
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21 posted 01-27-2000 01:10 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Very powerful and well written

I enjoyed this one very much!
blueyz75
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22 posted 01-27-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for blueyz75   Email blueyz75   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blueyz75's Home Page   View IP for blueyz75

Sometimes, as much as I want control, I also want someone to come along and help me out, to take some of the crap off.  I love the independant feeling but hate that "alone" feeling.

Kelly
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