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Martie
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0 posted 2000-01-12 07:01 PM



In lavender abandon
stretched toward the open road
this rose of winter’s day
exposes its fragile elegance
as you pass and look
your dog leashed and eager

I see from the window
as you soften
your vision inhaling
the open petal invitation

Heel to the notion
I think to you
across the lawn
for this bloom is so transient
a velvet that succumbs to minutes
and through the dark and dangerous night
will not linger

Breathe it into reverence
though your tether is bounding
it is still
and in its blooming
cares not of mortal whim
but
it would make me smile


 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
devina
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1 posted 2000-01-12 07:04 PM


Your title was beautiful in itself.  The feelings are even more so..enjoyed the read!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 2000-01-12 07:07 PM


Yes, I agree, Wonderful title, wonderful poem
Liz

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3 posted 2000-01-12 07:10 PM


Lavender delight! Beautiful, Martie!  

 Denise


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4 posted 2000-01-12 07:26 PM


This is sweet Marti , I love the smell of Lavender its a wonderful smell  
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5 posted 2000-01-12 09:33 PM


Lovely
Alwye
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6 posted 2000-01-12 09:51 PM


Very lovely work, indeed.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


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7 posted 2000-01-12 09:58 PM


Very nice your poem, enjoyed it very much

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Pepper
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8 posted 2000-01-12 10:16 PM


How very, very lovely this piece Martie.
And the imagery is wonderful....


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



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9 posted 2000-01-13 07:36 AM


Martie -

Can't imagine how this one slipped
right past me ... the smell of the
lavendar drew me to it for sure.

Lovely .......
~*Marge*~

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10 posted 2000-01-13 08:12 AM


Martie, this poem is poignant testimony to the wonder of open senses...the passerby in his pause, the observer in her silent appeal, and the reader, whose good fortune it is to have encountered this lovely petal of poetry, evocative in its subtle urging.

"I see from the window
as you soften
your vision inhaling
the open petal invitation"

So pleased to have read this beautiful poem today!

Dear LadyClaire



Michael
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11 posted 2000-01-13 09:38 AM


"a velvet that succumbs to minutes
and through the dark and dangerous night
will not linger"...

That's got to be one of the coolest lines I've ever read.  Love the overall expression in this entire piece.  Great work, Martie.


Michael

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12 posted 2000-01-13 10:02 AM


beautiful poetry... enjoyed very much.
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13 posted 2000-01-13 10:43 AM


I inhaled this entire poem, Martie! Ahhhhhh its beautiful!  Exquisite imagery  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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14 posted 2000-01-13 11:47 AM


Yes, this poem is very unusual. I enjoy poetry that appeals to the senses, and this one does wonderfully.  I like the thinly veiled mystery too.
Martie
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15 posted 2000-01-13 03:09 PM


Thank you all so much for your thoughtful replies to this poem.  To my surprise the rose is still there, stretching its fragrant neck, and it smells so sweet.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

Andrew Scott
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16 posted 2000-01-13 03:32 PM


I do so enjoy your style.  Although I am far from reading all that have posted within these poetic halls, you and yours strike me as quite unique. Peace to you and yours.
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