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Michael
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0 posted 01-12-2000 05:36 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

NIGHT

The doors are locked.
All shades are drawn.
Secure in my castle of insecurity,
I sit in
Darkness
anticipating nothing.

Soft
music rumbles across
a lined forehead,
seeping its way
into the dormant channels
of my brain.
I sing along,
words memorized
to songs
I never even hear.

Disc Changer,
so carefully programmed.
Remote, scattered in pieces,
yielding gracefully
from shadow
to
the Wall,
towering precariously
over its latest victim.

Nothing changing, ever,
Numbness
intercedes.
Bleary eyes focusing intently
on the clock, slowly erasing hours,
in her always celebrated
digital countdown to
Death.

There, I see it.
A seeping strip of fire
peeking at me
through the blinds.
I am
Saved.

I feel it glowing,
the warmth of Dawn.
Safely in her arms,
I sigh.

Finally,
Sleep.

Michael Anderson




[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 01-12-2000).]
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1 posted 01-12-2000 06:51 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is wonderful Michael , I have felt every emotion is this piece. I like it  
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2 posted 01-12-2000 08:12 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Michael -

Glad the 'sun also rises' for you.
I welcome the cloak of the night ...
and wait in anticipation ...
for the rising of the sun.
Understanding this completely.
~*Marge*~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Mike
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3 posted 01-12-2000 09:21 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

The consistency of you efforts never falters, which is explained by your God given talents and the fact you write from within.  Another excellent work.
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4 posted 01-12-2000 09:29 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Michael,
You do write from within and it shows.
Your poem is excellent from all of us that know. Bravo Sy
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5 posted 01-12-2000 10:15 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Well, I've read through this twice now and see that this can be taken a couple different ways..To be, or not to be a metaphor?!  
  Now THAT'S good poetry!  Well done, Michael. You have great talent.
Nan
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6 posted 01-12-2000 12:01 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Michael, my friend... Just because Balladeer and I are sleeping normal hours - that doesn't mean you have to stay up ALL night watching the forum... It's all right if you sleep - Honest.....

This is a pretty darned good poem you wrote in the middle of the night, though......
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7 posted 01-12-2000 12:15 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Michael, this is wonderful. I really like the change of your style you used for this one, it suits you well, would like to see a few more in total, and might I add wonderful, free verse like this.
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8 posted 01-12-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I really like your ability at free verse...I know you think it's not your forte, but alas, you do it well!     This is a remarkable piece...I can see you waiting up all through the night....I know you do this, quite frequently.  I guess that's why you were so good at describing it here.     Why do you wait till Dawn to find rest babe?  I will rescue you from your castle of insecurity soon.  You've used some powerfully descriptive words for mood and tone in this.  As usual, your talent shines through even in the sadest and darkest of poetry.  I love you....
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9 posted 01-12-2000 06:23 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A talented poet no matter the form you choose! Well done, again, Michael!  

 Denise

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10 posted 01-12-2000 06:55 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent, Michael. I thought I was reading Severn for a minute!...and that's a tribute to both of you. Good work!

Nan, tell 'em you didn't mean TOGETHER!!
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11 posted 01-12-2000 07:00 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Don't worry Deer, we all KNOW what she meant..he he...Very descriptive words here Micheal, your changable talent shines through again!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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12 posted 01-12-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

...um.... to-what????...
Michael
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Thank you all for the kind words...I don't think I will ever "comfortably" post a free verse piece in here but I sure appreciate the vote of confidence.

Balladeer, I consider that the ultimate compliment.  I would be lying if I said I wasn't inspired by Severn's style of poetry.  Indeed, some of the best free verse I've ever read.  TY

Gen, you are the Dawn that ends my Darkness.
It's only in the arms of your love I rest at all.


Michael

[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 01-13-2000).]
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14 posted 01-13-2000 07:04 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Michael - thankyou for directing me to this - it is excellent!

It has the all important freeverse flow...the sparity that captures your emotions. One thing - I do not think most of your punctuation is necessary. I find that in most FV the flow is dictated by the words - and the sound of them creates natural spaces, pauses and emphasis - I would suggest removing them just to see how it reads.

There, I see it.
A seeping strip of fire
peeking at me
through the blinds.
I am
Saved.

I absolutely love this! Wow - it calls to me, an exquisite part!

I do think you have done a remarkable job, Michael,   More please!!!

(Btw - you and Balladeer have so much faith in me - thankyou both! I do so appreciate it)

K
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15 posted 01-13-2000 08:33 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

A very descript poem you have here, Michael.
I ain't gonna brag about you because it's already been done. Just keep up the good work though.

 Nathan
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16 posted 01-14-2000 12:25 AM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

I truly enjoy reading your writings. you are very versatile with your creations. Keep it going. Just one question If you are up all night and sleep by day ummm you are not a vampire are you? (heheheheh)
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17 posted 01-14-2000 12:30 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Michael, first Excellent poem! 2nd are you being plagued by these sleepless nights again?  I hope not, but I fear so...You will be in my prayers!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


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18 posted 01-14-2000 02:14 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

"There, I see it.
A seeping strip of fire
peeking at me
through the blinds.
"

Brilliant imagery (if you'll pardon the pun).

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

 
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