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bsquirrel
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0 posted 01-11-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

This was not an easy poem to write. Since I'm never going to show it to the person it's meant for, I thought I'd just put it up here, and let the words speak for themselves. Life can be so complicated sometimes. Yet, thankfully with the right perspective, still joyful and still a miracle.

Mike

-rubber duck bridge-
What you never told me
Burns inside of me.
That movie we watched on a wintry New Hampshire night,
What the blocks spelled out in the cast members' hands.
I never would have guessed the insect's identity.

I understand why you let me go.

The past is a rubber duck bridge,
Lots of squeaky toys,
Depressed, left to halffloat in water.

You, triumphantly, realistically,
Made it through the deep.
Yes, you got wet.
But you dried yourself off
With understanding passion.

And it's not a victim's sympathy I give you.
I don't think of you as someone ugly,
Someone so awkward and terrible and a monster.
That was never what I felt.

I think of you as the strongest woman I've ever met.
Sometimes, in anger, I try to forget.
And I know you're uncomfortable with what I've said.

Even a mother's angry tears can't drown out the truth.
You watch, you're going to make a mark all yours,
As beautiful and crushingly delicate as a rose,
Stem held by a child-like adult,
Not an adult-like child.

Long after the rubber ducks have floated away,
Eyes sunken, beaks smile-frozen, color drained,
I will still think of you with joy in my mind.
I won't intrude on you, even if it means being left behind.
If you still want my friendship, I'll be there at your side.
(but even from afar, I will take joy in your flight:
the toybox bathtub girl has made it -- and oh what a height!)


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Nan
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1 posted 01-12-2000 07:42 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Mike - These are great sentiments... and very unselfish of you - Perhaps you should show them to her.....
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 01-12-2000 09:39 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow Mike, think she really needs to see this one  
whiskey
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3 posted 01-12-2000 10:07 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Mike ,This is so unselfish, you should show her this, she needs to see it  
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4 posted 01-12-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Wonderfully done...these feelings are special, and yes, unselfish. You have a big heart. I hope she knows what a special friend she has.

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


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5 posted 01-12-2000 11:56 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

If it weren't for the first stanza, I would show the poem to her. It's a veiled reference to a movie we saw together -- one with such strange connotations it told me more about her than the movie, and more, than I think, she wanted me to know. That, compounded with lots and lots of hints and observations of her and her family, made me come to a painful conclusion about her past -- one I can't share. It's very personal and hurtful, and, moreover, none of my business. I wrote this poem to get that out of my head. The only hint I can give is the movie we saw, at her request, was Angels and Insects. Very obscure, I'm sure. That's it.
Anne
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6 posted 01-13-2000 12:12 AM       View Profile for Anne   Email Anne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Anne

WOW!!!
What an unforgetable poem.  There are so many lines that struck sparks with me--how beautifully tragic and yet hopeful!
Keep up the wonderful work!
Corazon
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7 posted 02-25-2000 05:43 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

yep pretty incredible poem, it is nice to come to a spot that you can see them for who they are and wish them well...good poem mike
bsquirrel
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8 posted 05-22-2002 07:29 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks. This one is very personal and sad and ah kinda wish th' events in i' never happened. Ah well .... such is life sometahms...

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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9 posted 01-01-2003 04:47 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

what a man you are! I admire that.
bsquirrel
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10 posted 01-02-2003 10:53 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

*sigh*
 
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