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Souls Like Crystal Snowflakes [Challenge from DreamEvil]

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Souls Like Crystal Snowflakes
[Challenge from DreamEvil]

Not so very long ago
during a midnight it chanced to snow
and early, around 3:00 a.m. or so,
I awoke to a glistening glow.

There was no sound, no apparent life,
but only in a fairy tale-like dream,
could I imagine souls like crystal snowflakes
come upon my scene.

For there was a sparkle all around
as the skies had cleared and the moon abound
forth, over the land covered white,
my crystal snowflake souls and I, alone in the night.

For each flake was an individual spirit
before it joined its companions white
and like my world, they all joined in
unity, to make things appear so right.

So may souls like crystal snowflakes
abound round you this year;
and keep in mind during summer;
that in rainbows they will appear.

İKRJ
11 January 2000



 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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1 posted 01-11-2000 11:22 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

A lovely scene of tranquility, Sunshine.  Beautiful.  

--Kess


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What a lovely piece of writing, Sunshine! I especially enjoyed the last line of your first stanza, partly because I respond strongly to the alliteration, but also because of the sheer simplicity of your phrasing. Loved how, within your poem, the snowflakes each were souls, and were transformed in summer to rainbows...such an imaginative concept!

Dear LadyClaire


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Thanks Sunshine!
I love snowflakes.
EARTHMAN
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Skyfyre, Meadowmuse, Paul - the thanks go to DreamEvil for his lovely challenge.  MM, I sincerely appreciate the depth into which you looked into this piece, and your words of praise.  Thank you.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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A rainbow only appears with sunshine,
Beautiful poem
Liz
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 01-12-2000 09:03 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sunshine,
You have out done yourself. You have a true epopee here. Bravo. and *L* Sy
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Elizabeth, Sy, there are a few poets within Passions that I truly aspire to reach - so I thank you for reading, and your kind words.  I will continue to write to please you.  Thank you.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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Sunshine...I don't believe you and snow could exist at the same time, you're so bright you'd melt every last bit. Lovely poem  
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What a lovely compliment, Hoot - thank you - but haven't you seen the Sun do wonders to a snowcapped landscape?  Engulfs the imagination...

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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Oh so lovely, Sunshine! Your creativity is marvelous    I agree with Meadow...turning the snowflakes to rainbows was wonderful!

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


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Thank you, Caroline.  At first I didn't think that line belonged, but now I see that it does.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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This left me in a dream-like trance...So very lovely Sunshine!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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Thanks, Pepper, but the credit must go to DE for his challenge...

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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