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The end of the world ( updated version )

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Nate Dogg
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0 posted 01-11-2000 05:22 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

When i wrote this months ago, I didn't like it but I read it yesterday and decided that it was good enough to come on this board. I hope y'll like it.


I can't tell you when the world will end
but one day it will, my friend.
Whoever created it,
will see fit,
to destroy it.
And this is rightfully so
because our world is ordo abacho (out of chaos).
I know that the Holy Creator hates,
to see our world in complete waste.
He put human beings,
on the earth for a reason
but nowdays, people kill each other,
from father, mother,
sister, brother,
or lover.
Drugs, alcohol, guns, and money,
put our world in worser jeopardy.
With the existance of such groups like the KKK,
no wonder why people dwell in hate.
The Nation of Islam is no exception either,
as they seem to hate every white Peter.
Martin Luther king's speech,
is a good example of how our world should be.
But the world is not perfect
and we have the serpent,
to thank for that!
It seems like the devil is winning,
as the world is drowning in it's own sinning.
The Holy Creator probaly thinks that it was a mistake,
to create this darn place.
I believe that one day, the sun will explode
and the whole world will be cold.
I believe everything including space,
will return to it's original place.
There will be nothing left but pitch-black darkness.
All of the bodies of water will be dried
and every living thing will die.
If I ever witness the end of the world,
it would bring joy to my eyes
but, I admit that it would be a frightning sight,
to see billions of people and myself die.
The Holy Creator,
will also be reduced to a zero denominator,
as he doesn't want to see his heart,
once again torn apart,
if another world was to start.
You know it's sad when I'm glad of this
but at times, the world truly desrves it.



 Nathan
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Denise
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1 posted 01-11-2000 06:03 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very intense poem, Nate. Although I don't agree with everything you stated, you do have some good points in here.

 Denise

Nate Dogg
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2 posted 01-11-2000 06:52 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

I don't agree with some of thing in the poem either. I don't agree with the God part. The words didn't come out exactly the way I wanted them to come out. And the other part about the devil is winning, I think it's about equal. Thank you for the post!

 Nathan
whiskey
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3 posted 01-12-2000 09:57 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Nate , This is intense I had to read it over and over, I dont know what it is about it, but its interesting to me  
Elizabeth Santos
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since 11-08-1999
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4 posted 01-12-2000 10:48 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Nate,
I am much more an optomist, and think that the world is getting better, despite all the hatred and crime. Those same things are written in the annals of history. Things keep changing, I see the age of Aquarius as a time of spiritual awareness. Although my views may be slightly influence by these rose colored glasses I wear
Interesting subject matter
Liz
Nate Dogg
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5 posted 01-12-2000 04:35 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you Whiskey for the sweet comments.
Liz, you right about the world. I also feel that there are less crimes today. Thanks for your comments and your words of wisdom.


 Nathan
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