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I stand here..
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I stand here.. |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, 
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I stand here impatiently, At your minds door, To affriad to ask you, Answers only hurt me more. I stand here foolishly, With so much to overcome, Losing sight of the future, Wondering where its coming from. I stand here in silence, Insecurities in hand, Thinking back into the past, Reliving it agian. I stand here challening, All the sweetness that we've known, I've been here so long, But is this really my home? I stand here but cant whisper, That we never let it go, The past, and my pain, That I never seemed to show. I stand here anticipating, What the outcome will be, After all the hurtful words, You chose to say to me. I stand here but dont enter, Perhaps another day, When your stubborness and mine, Will have something more to say. [This message has been edited by amber (edited 01-11-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sometimes it's really hard to take that first step Amber....to chance what may be waiting on the other side of that door, but sometimes we just have to give in and hope what's on the other side is better than on the side we came from. Good luck  |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is wonderful Amber, well written and I agree with Hoot we somtimes need to takes chances |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I hear a sadness in this beautifully written piece of work. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent poem! I've been at that door and turned away also!  |
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Bbuzz Member
since 1999-12-17
Posts 76Washinton State |
Amber, I wish for you the freedom to express yourself openly and honestly, without fear, to anyone, but ESPECIALLY to that one special person with whom you choose to spend your life. Your poem touched me. Thank you. |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, |
Thank you all so much, I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem, and understod this little part of me. thank you. |
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Dreamer_556 Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 34 |
Beautiful Amber! I've also been there  )~*Dreamer*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You are a very talented writer, Amber. I always enjoy reading your poems! Denise |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
THis is really good, the last stanza Kicks a mucho butt, tres excellent. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
My advise as you will see the door shall open up for thee There is one thing I have to say Love will always find a way I like the way you wrote this down For this you should get a crown Keep knocking at the wood And it shall open as it should Very nice The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, |
Your replies mean more than you know. HelmutB thank you so much for your words they are so kind, I am glad that you ejoyed my poem. Keeper, now How did i know that i would hear from you? LOL thank you so much, i never thought that my poetry could touch someone so much. i used to think before i started posting here that the only heart that could truly understand and cherish my writing was me, but since i have been here i have learned differently! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Now,sis, I think I'm jealous...I used to be the only one who got to share your work  But I guess I can learn to share a lil bit...seeing as how "I" still get to go through your stuff while you're sleepin- he he! And by the way HUN(te-he), I'm glad you and your stubborness got through this. Much love from your sis-ter!Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this hits home, what I feel now |
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