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Tramp Poet
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Could Be Anywhere...


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Asher Keep

A thought occurs to me, like lightning
as I watch my wife and her mother
drive away off to church
dressed in their Sabbath finery.

Sitting on the porch
bundled in Navaho poncho
fresh coffee and morning smoke;
the dogs out back complaining
about having to stay home,
the birds by dozens flocking
to their home-made feeders,
laughing at the cats stalking-
showing their aerial frustrations;
ah yes,  our life here is fulfilling.

Warm, crisp January morning
in the Oklahoma woodlands
My wife and her mom smile
I see their lips moving
from behind automobile glass,
discussing me... no doubt!
A few compliments
a helping hand with braided hair
and off they go into the morning;
ah yes, our life here is fulfilling.

A thought occurs to me, like lightning
as I watch my wife and her mother
drive away on Sabbath morn...
a simple yet profound realization
of how very much I love them.

DJBurt  1/99
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  there is only one...
Romans 10:9-10
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Kid Pedestal
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1 posted 01-11-2000 03:32 AM       View Profile for Kid Pedestal   Email Kid Pedestal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kid Pedestal's Home Page   View IP for Kid Pedestal

I can almost feel your thoughts and emotions while reading this.  Very Nice.

Kid Pedestal

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Marge Tindal
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2 posted 01-11-2000 06:49 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Daniel -

This is really very nicely done.
~*Marge*~
hoot_owl_rn
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Yes...the love shines through clearly
Meadowmuse
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4 posted 01-11-2000 09:20 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Your poetic simplicity here so expressively  portrays the depth of your sentiment. A wonderful, early morning missive.

Dear LadyClaire


Bbuzz
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I can picture your morning easily. How Clear!
And isn't it funny how those moments of love just come out of nowhere and isn't it neat when they do.You have been blessed obviously!
Denise
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I was sittin' right there with you on the porch! Great poem!    

 Denise

PhaerieChild
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7 posted 01-11-2000 06:52 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Hi Bro I remember Asher Keep. Great poem this is. I can see Mom amd Wendy Woo right now discussing you and your many foibles. LOL Love ya...Sis

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho

Tramp Poet
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Could Be Anywhere...


8 posted 01-12-2000 12:19 PM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet

i'm totally amused...
one works one's fingers to the bone
for over thirty years perfecting one's
craft...getting the phrasing and word
play and structure just right!  And the
poems which impacts others are the ones
that just jump onto the page...go figger!
Thank you all for the wonderfull gift of irony...


  there is only one...
Romans 10:9-10
 
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