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The Love of Destiny

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Skyfyre
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0 posted 01-11-2000 12:26 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

Bright Destiny, upon her hallowed height,
Did weave her cloth beyond the eyes of Man
For ages long, until, to her delight,
A pilgrim came unto her lofty land.

With hopeful voice, and humble manner came
This faithful man, to ask of her a boon.
Impressed, she granted anything he'd name:
If asked, she might have given him the moon.

But he, in quiet tones, on bended knee,
Asked not the riches she was thinking of:
He whispered, "Only this I ask of thee,
Dear Lady, that you favor me with Love."

She answered, "Seek thou not such flighty things;
For this one gift I cannot guarantee –
‘Tis threefold pain for every joy it brings –
Ask not this boon, brave Knight, I beg of thee."

"Oh sovereign Queen," he begged, "oh Lady Bright,
I humbly ask that you do not deny
My one request – else on this curse'd night
I shall of my despair most surely die!"

"Beseech me not! For this is no reward
That thou hast asked!" she said, her visage grim,
"‘Tis kinder fate to die upon the sword
Than live as slave to Love's inconstant whim!"

But he, unfazed, would not her warning heed,
So she, with anguished heart, her promise kept:
And in her magic web, performed the deed
He asked of her, but as he left, she wept;

For Destiny, with her enchanted eyes,
Within her web, could see a tangled skein
That spoke of his untainted heart's demise
And in its wake, an endless well of pain.

She saw her Knight, his vibrant spirit bled
Of all delight, in payment for his quest:
And so, with heavy heart, she cut the thread,
And gathered him, in Love, unto her breast.


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.





[This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 01-11-2000).]
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bsquirrel
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1 posted 01-11-2000 12:45 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Just wanted to say I enjoyed this ... contemporary olde englishe. Eh, trying to fit things into labels is for idiots. Let's just say, I enjoyed this poem! Yuo have a pretty complex rhythm structure going on in it, too; a lot of syllables. But it worked.

Mike
Nicole
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2 posted 01-11-2000 01:12 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Kess, absolutely astonishing work.     Ok, well not astonishing, I'm really not that surprised at the excellence...I've come to expect it from you.

Well done, as always

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
DreamEvil
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3 posted 01-11-2000 02:37 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Kess I find I like the depth and breadth of your thoughts lately my friend, moreso than usual.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
                                            DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
                        (Marquis de Sade)




[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 01-11-2000).]
Dark Angel
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4 posted 01-11-2000 04:53 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Skyfyre, this is most excellent, I just love the old english style, Beautiful work!!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Bojopy
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5 posted 01-11-2000 05:58 AM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

Have you ever been published?  You write so beautifully and I can't see how anyone could deny your words.  If you have never submitted a poem then I think you should!  I don't usually come to this forum anymore but I'm glad I saw this one.  Anyway I'm going back to dark!  I will check for your response to this hopefully soon!

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)

hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 01-11-2000 08:32 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Kes...this is an absolutely enchanting and wonderful read. You have outdone yourself once more. Very fine work  
HelmutB
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7 posted 01-11-2000 08:49 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

This is very nice
For I like to be the Knight
The lady surely is a queen
To take in the soldiers been
Thank you for such a beautiful piece

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

lostboy
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8 posted 01-11-2000 09:53 AM       View Profile for lostboy   Email lostboy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lostboy

'tis a wonderful tale Kess. You never cease to amaze!
Sally S.
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9 posted 01-11-2000 09:57 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

This by far, is my favorite of your works!!  What a fine job, Kess!  Brilliant.  
Local Rebel
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10 posted 01-11-2000 09:59 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Now see here... ther is nothing wrong with sing-song!

Well, well done m'lady.  
Denise
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11 posted 01-11-2000 01:27 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Kess, this is magnificent! You really are quite a talented writer!    

 Denise

Terrina Kethryveris
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12 posted 01-11-2000 03:46 PM       View Profile for Terrina Kethryveris   Email Terrina Kethryveris   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terrina Kethryveris

How beautiful my friend. Another wondeful piece, of course I expect nothing less form you.  

Terri


 Truth be known, fantasy is much more appealing than reality.
Skyfyre
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13 posted 01-11-2000 07:30 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

bsquirrel:  Thank you for your kind comment, though I doubt you'll find too many idiots here to require catergorization LOL.     This "lot of syllables" is simply my normal iambic pentameter, to which I seem to be a slave ...

Satiate, DE -- thank you for your continued support; I cannot express my gratitude.  

Dark Angel -- I am rather partial to Olde English as well, though it does not always lend itself to my verse LOL

Bojopy:  My work has never been published, but I am working on submissions for two academic publications at present -- one local and one international.  I'll let you know how it comes out!  

Ruth:  Whom else shall I outdo but myself?  Thank you so much my friend ...  

Helmut: your kind compliment qualifies you as a Knight in my book.  Thank you.  

lostboy:  Amaze?  Well that is high praise indeed ...  

Sally:  I hope to give you a new favorite every time my friend, thank you.  

L. R.:  There is when that's all you seem to be able to write!  LOL

dsnyder, Terri:  you are too kind to this humble poet.  That's not to say I don't appreciate it though!  

Smooches,

--Kess

Nan
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14 posted 01-11-2000 09:49 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

LOL@ too many syllables.... Hehe... Wasn't Mozart told he used "too many notes"?....

...and you can't use too much of that darned archaic language either...

You know I love it!!!....    
Alwye
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15 posted 01-11-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Definitely astounding!  Had to pull out the dictionary for a couple words, but that's a good thing!  Very beautiful, with exellent flow.  I do agree, you have got to be published!  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

Meadowmuse
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16 posted 01-11-2000 10:43 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

This is an exceptional poem, Skyfyre. I love the twist, the irony. Beautiful work!

Dear LadyClaire


Mike
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17 posted 01-11-2000 10:51 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Truly exceptional.
bsquirrel
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18 posted 01-11-2000 11:35 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Iambic Pentameter (flashes back to college literature course), we meet again!   Seriously though, I just want you to know, I did enjoy your work. I have a lot of enthusiasm when it comes to poetry, and I realize that sometimes that might come over wrong in such a paradox of personal yet faceless that is the Internet. When I write my replies, I'm responding to what touched me, what caught me, or simply what I thought was interesting. In other words, comments like "a lot of syllables" isn't a put-down: it's just an observation. I really did enjoy this poem, though -- both for its language, and its truthful view.

Keep 'em coming. And you better get published sometime soon!

Mike
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


19 posted 01-21-2000 02:20 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Destiny/Fate...Lachesis, Clotho, Atropos.
Beautifully spun m'friend, showing the love, the courage, the sadness and the death.
Well crafted indeed!

 "O human race, born to fly upward, wherefore at a little wind dost thou so fall?"
Dante Alighieri
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20 posted 01-21-2000 02:26 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

This piece defines the cherrished skill of flowing.  Beautiful wording.  Excellent job
 
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