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Shattered Crystal

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Lucie
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0 posted 01-10-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lucie

A prostitute, I turned from you.
You were harsh and rude and street wise.
One day I took the time to look
and saw a child in your eyes.

The baby dolls you never owned.
The evil parents bent on pain.
So young to be here all alone.
nothing to lose, so much to gain.

I reached a gentle hand to you.
I promised you could come along.
You clung to me and let me lead.
I tried to teach you to be strong.

Showed you a life you’d never led.
I took you where you’d never been.
Now three years later it’s so sad
that you are on the street again.

Your strung out on that evil crack
And you’ve gone back to what you know.
I offered you all that I could
when you had no where left to go.

Twenty years old and on the street
I told you there was so much more.
Now you are faced with evil truths
That you weren’t caused to face before.

I promised I would stand by you,
That I would be your one true friend.
The drugs caused you to walk away,
but not what took you in the end.

How do I say goodbye to you?
The little girl I couldn’t save.
I’ll just have to pray you see
This rose I place upon your grave.

I'll miss you always Crystal Lynn
It's sad that you will never know.
That in this world you had a friend
I'll never let your memory go.
© Copyright 2000 Lucille Dobbins - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 01-10-2000 09:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is a powerful, sad piece. Very well written. I can feel the pain in your words, Lucie.

 Denise

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 01-10-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lucie -

This is heartbreaking ...
and hauntingly lovely.
Hard to understand ...
when you do all you can ...
and it isn't enough.

Bless you.
~*Marge*~
Lucie
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3 posted 01-10-2000 09:36 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Sometimes love just isn't enough. But this heart can never stop trying.
whiskey
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4 posted 01-10-2000 09:36 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Lucie,
this is sad, I can feel your emotion
its often hard to understand why all our efforts are sometimes not enough
WhtDove
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5 posted 01-10-2000 10:13 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Sniff, wiping tears!  Wow does the hurt ever come through this! Excellent job and very sad!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 01-11-2000 08:20 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Lucie...this is heart wrenching  
Lucie
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7 posted 01-11-2000 12:12 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Thank you all for your replies.. it is difficult to accept that I could not save her.
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8 posted 01-11-2000 12:21 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Lucie: This is beautiful and heartbreaking. I know you'll never stop grieving or wishing she'd made a better choice, but that won't stop you from trying to help someone else. And I'm glad of that, though I pray your heart isn't broken again. *S* At least she HAD a choice... before you, she didn't.
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 01-11-2000 12:26 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Knowing this was written from your own experience makes this piece all the more heartrending. Such a tender glimpse into a sad story. Thanks for sharing here.

Dear LadyClaire
RainbowGirl
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10 posted 01-11-2000 08:44 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Lucie: Bless you both

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

Alwye
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11 posted 01-11-2000 10:43 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Deeply moving and powerful.  Exellent work.

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

Andrew Scott
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12 posted 01-11-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Lady Lucie: I have no doubt from your words here that you tried your best, but it was not for you to save her... it was she who had to make that happen. Some people just don't have the strength to make it through, no matter how much love and support they are offered.  Your poem speaks volumes for what you did and I hope that spark of humanity within you always burns bright for those whom have lost their way. My best to you and yours.

Andrew

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 01-12-2000).]
poetFemmeFatale
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13 posted 01-11-2000 11:49 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh dear Lucie....now I know why you haven't been back in full swing yet....I am so sorry.  You did all you could do, as Andrew said.  The rest was up to her, and she just wasn't strong enough.  I am proud of you for trying.  Keep you chin up....you must be going through a rough time with this.  It's terrible...such a waste of a young precious life.  You are in my thoughts babe.  You know I'm here if you need to talk....Drop me an email or look for me on ICQ.....Love, Gen
BTW, this poem was a beautiful tribute for her....
 
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