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patchoulipumpkin
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0 posted 01-10-2000 08:43 PM       View Profile for patchoulipumpkin   Email patchoulipumpkin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for patchoulipumpkin

What do you recommend?

I stare down at my shoes under the table
And see how dirty it is under there
Cigarette butts, gum, lint, wood chips
All the leftovers
That we didn’t need

Its like a tiny universe with its own elements
That bottle top could be a planet
Obviously the ants are the inhabitants
The empty bag of chips, a tanning studio

No, that’s silly
Ants don’t need to tan
They’re already brown
Let’s make that empty bag of chips
A space station

They could walk into there where…
CAN I TAKE YOUR ORDER SIR?
Oh, Yes, umm….
What do you recommend?

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Denise
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1 posted 01-10-2000 08:54 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Cute and clever, Patch!  I enjoyed this!  

 Denise

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2 posted 01-11-2000 01:17 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Definitely a fun read. Thanks for the smile -- and the thoughts.

Mike
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Nothing like the outdoor cafe!! I hope that was where you were at. If not well it was funny..
Nicole
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4 posted 01-11-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

  Lighthearted and a wonderful read.  I actually started giggling when I read about ants already being brown.  Thank you for the smile and laugh.

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
PhaerieChild
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5 posted 01-11-2000 02:03 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Patchouli,who would have ever thought of a space station for ants? I guess only you would have ROFG...love it and really love the giggles...

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho

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6 posted 01-11-2000 06:53 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Patch -

Definitely different.
LOL !
Enjoyed the *giggle*.
~*Marge*~
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Smiling...certainly creative!!
HelmutB
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8 posted 01-11-2000 02:44 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

True I must say...Nice work

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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