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'Home'

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Severn
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0 posted 01-10-2000 08:40 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Home


Homely held
without walls

I

live only in
an invention
of
image:

chairs that know
my arms as they rest
a fridge
squeaking welcome
pots that clatter
familiarity

instead

I search
unowning
flicking through
lifeless print

circling
with a pen
hoping for people
quiet

I stumble on unknown paths
pat unknown cats
and move

into weighted rooms
of
other-breath
still dancing
with the dust motes

Homeless
at the core
just handing over
money
for the right to
plump comfortably
on a couch
another bought
long before
I scuff the carpet

and I cry

wanting just to
melt into the
sameness
of a place
called

‘home’

for longer than
a year

I am not of this nature
to adventure
the way of packing
and tearing tape

I want to settle

like
motes
raised only
under the stir
of my breath

within halls
I mould
and

claim

11.01.2000


© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Nate Dogg
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1 posted 01-10-2000 08:50 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

You have quite a imagination Severn, I loved the poem too!

 Nathan
Denise
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2 posted 01-10-2000 08:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I hope you find 'home' real soon, Severn. Well done, once again! Your longing comes through loud and clear in this!  

 Denise

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 01-10-2000 10:15 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
An unuasual read, but I enjoyed it *L* Sy
First__Knight
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4 posted 01-10-2000 10:35 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Awesome Severn......You know there is one thing I hate more the moving......It is moving someone else    Home is where you heart lies....Not the place where your body does  

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"


Balladeer
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5 posted 01-10-2000 10:52 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Don't ask me why..picking one of your poems as my favorite is a labor of Hercules...but this is it. Perhaps because the longing and wanting of it strikes such a deep chord in me, perhaps because the sadness is so real, perhaps because your pots clatter familiarity or you pet unknown cats....whatever it is, this one will stay with me for a long time. Thank you, Kamla.
Corinne
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6 posted 01-11-2000 12:30 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Severn, I must say...

This is, without a doubt, the best poem I've read in this forum!


Bar None, hon!  If you haven't already submitted this to publishers, you might want to consider it!

Corinne
Martie
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7 posted 01-11-2000 12:35 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kamla, Kamla, I don't know how to express the feelings this poem gave me--so pure and elegantly simple that I knew exactly what you meant but could never have expressed it thus.  You have such a talent!

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Nicole
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8 posted 01-11-2000 01:14 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Severn - What can I possibly say that has not already been said?  Your writing pallete paints masterpieces; your words evoking feelings like none other.

Excellent

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
Kid Pedestal
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9 posted 01-11-2000 03:38 AM       View Profile for Kid Pedestal   Email Kid Pedestal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kid Pedestal's Home Page   View IP for Kid Pedestal

I love the way this is written.  It takes me into new steps of thought when I think about my writing.  Very nice.

Kid Pedestal
Dark Angel
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10 posted 01-11-2000 04:17 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Severn I echo all of the above, I hope you find home soon   *hugs* my friend.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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11 posted 01-11-2000 06:45 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kammie -
Home is in your heart.
It's where you take it ...
where you make it.
What a lovely, haunting
way you've described the search.
Soon, little one .... soon it will be
just the perfect place to be.
~*Marge*~
Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 01-11-2000 06:56 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Dear Kamla,
Your poem touched me very deeply because I know it's real. I can feel your hollowness and longing when I read this.
As far as the poem itself, absolutely superb.
(But dn't forget, you do have a home in Pennsylvania, you know.)
Keep your wonderful spirit,
Love ya,
Liz
hoot_owl_rn
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13 posted 01-11-2000 08:54 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Kamla...even though I never know what the subject matter is going to be when I open up one of your works, I do know one thing...it's going to be great and it's going to blow me away, your words always do. This is so moving, so sad, but oh so well written!
Sally S.
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14 posted 01-11-2000 10:03 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

This is certainly one of the most heartfelt poems I've read.  You can feel the longing and sadness here.  Excellent writing!
Poet deVine
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15 posted 01-11-2000 10:09 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Elegantly said. I felt this way after my divorce...someday, you'll have a place to call your own! Believe it!  
Michael
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16 posted 01-11-2000 10:45 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Kamla, you work never ceases to amaze me.  This is awesome, and I relate so well to the theme.  I've never truly felt at home where I am....I long for that feeling.  To have it settle in...  Very touching pice.  Kudos  

Michael
Pepper
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I have to agree Severn...your work never ceases to amaze and enchant me...a poetess first class!
This piece is exceptional and speaks to me in a most personal way....I have finally found my 'home' and hope the same for you soon.....

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


Ted Reynolds
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18 posted 01-11-2000 12:37 PM       View Profile for Ted Reynolds   Email Ted Reynolds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ted Reynolds

Yes!!!  Been there, felt that.
mirjam
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19 posted 01-11-2000 03:57 PM       View Profile for mirjam   Email mirjam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mirjam

Kamla every time i find a new favourite of yours you go and write another!!!  I totally agree with Balladeer, and actually everyone else - the longing and sadness is evoked through your words, the way you place them, the sense of the poem is alive with a deep hollowness that extends deeper than your feeling of homelessness.  Know that even when you are in borrowed space the space in your heart is a home not only for your poetry and everything else special that it contains, but it is a home where Christ settles and lives in forever - sweetie you'll find a place real soon, I know it.
Loved this poem beyond words hon.
HelmutB
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20 posted 01-11-2000 08:00 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Very nice account
I know all to well how it feels
Moving from Germany to Canada
Talking about Roots here.
Good expression in your poem
Thanks

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

patchoulipumpkin
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21 posted 01-11-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for patchoulipumpkin   Email patchoulipumpkin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patchoulipumpkin

Severn, this was amazing.  I'm sure a lot of people can relate to this rootlessness, me included.  I think i've moved about 18-20 times in my lifetime, and skipped countries once, so i totally understand your perspective. Beautifully expressed.
caroline
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22 posted 01-12-2000 10:13 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Kam, we are kindred spirits in this...you've written a superb, absolutely perfect description of how it feels when home is not home. I hope someday we both know the comfort of knowing that where we are is where we always wanted to be. (((hugs)))

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Nan
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23 posted 01-12-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

This is truly a wonderful poem, Kamla.... and never forget that there is a true home within your own heart.... They can't take that from ya...
Toerag
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Nice job...interesting fersure!
 
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