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Tara Simms
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Following the Leader
By Alex Hahn

Take pity on us for we are lost
We know not where the sidewalk leads
We have no destination.

Take pity on us for we are lost
We seem to have no understanding
We whine and cry yet know not why.

Take pity on us for we are lost
We cannot seem to find our way
We need a guide, we need a light.

Take pity on us for we are lost
But donít give us bread and water
And donít give us clothing.

Take pity on us for we are lost
But donít tell me what to do
And donít ask me why I donít listen.

Take pity on us for we are lost
But never yell at us in anger
And never hide from us the truth.

Take pity on us for we are lost
We donít want to have any trouble
We just need someone to lead the way.

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This poem was written by a former student of mine, Alex Hahn, who doesn't have internet access.  He asked me to post it for him.  Please send replies to his email:  mrman143@juno.com
© Copyright 2000 Tara Simms - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 01-10-2000 07:13 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Will do...
Julie Jordan Scott
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Tara, thank goodness for Alex and students like him they have had the opportunity to know and work with you.  That is glorious in and of itself!

 I am a Life Purpose Coach who specializes in assisting
men and women to clarify their Life Purpose and then in turn
live true to their purpose. After 5 years working with the
Severely Mentally Ill in County Mental Health, I gave up the
bureaucracy (and safe, secure blanket) of this environment
to pursue my own purpose and passion.

Nan
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Posts 24426
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This is really a very wonderful first post.  I sincerely hope we have the opportunity to see more of Alex's work.  The repetition really adds to this poem.  A point is well made, and reinforced by subsequentl lines.  Nice job, Alex.....
Denise
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4 posted 01-10-2000 08:20 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is a very powerful piece. Well done, Alex!

 Denise

whiskey
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This is wonderful Alex, I hope to read more of your work  
moonmoon
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Wonderful work indeed Alex...Liked much..
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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Glen Hope, PA USA


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Wow, what a powerful poem by a young poet. Extreamely well done  
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