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patchoulipumpkin
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since 2000-01-01
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0 posted 2000-01-10 12:09 PM


I was watching this moth, and got interested about the way it surrounded this light so intensely, and watched it literally burn itself out with the heat from the lightbulb.  Then i thought of addiction, and tried the parallel.  Don't know if its accurate, but i hope there is something there.


The moth

There is a moth flying around my lampshade
He keeps zooming in, then going out
Then zooming back in again
As if he’s going to miss something

What is it about the light that pulls this moth along?
Gets driven to frenzy because he can’t turn it off
The light seems to make it crazy
Drives it to burn its wings on the lightbulb
But it keeps coming back for more

I’m told this is what addiction is like
You try to turn it off, but you have to keep it lit
Or you think you’ll die in a way
Not really die, but die somewhere inside
Give away a piece of you that you can’t retrieve
So you turn it back on before its lost

Even if you burn your wings
Stunt your flight
You need more
Even though it doesn’t need to be there
Its the light having to need to be there
That eventually kills the moth

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First__Knight
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since 1999-11-08
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1 posted 2000-01-10 01:27 AM


I like the way you have make the cross to this and the moth.  Done well with deep thoughts.  

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"



devina
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since 1999-10-28
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Cali
2 posted 2000-01-10 06:32 AM


Addiction can be like this in many ways, glad to see you have us thinking tonight! We can only sit and wonder when the moth is going to get burned enough to finally fly away...and yes, your parallel is acurate.

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Munda
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The Hague, The Netherlands
3 posted 2000-01-20 05:53 PM


I really enjoyed reading this and you did a very good job, comparing the moth with an addiction.
Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
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Florida
4 posted 2000-01-20 06:05 PM


I think you did an excellent job creating a parallel between the two.  There are some definate similarities, that you put across quite well.  I enjoyed the read, thank you!

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown

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