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The Moth

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patchoulipumpkin
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0 posted 01-10-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for patchoulipumpkin   Email patchoulipumpkin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for patchoulipumpkin

I was watching this moth, and got interested about the way it surrounded this light so intensely, and watched it literally burn itself out with the heat from the lightbulb.  Then i thought of addiction, and tried the parallel.  Don't know if its accurate, but i hope there is something there.


The moth

There is a moth flying around my lampshade
He keeps zooming in, then going out
Then zooming back in again
As if heís going to miss something

What is it about the light that pulls this moth along?
Gets driven to frenzy because he canít turn it off
The light seems to make it crazy
Drives it to burn its wings on the lightbulb
But it keeps coming back for more

Iím told this is what addiction is like
You try to turn it off, but you have to keep it lit
Or you think youíll die in a way
Not really die, but die somewhere inside
Give away a piece of you that you canít retrieve
So you turn it back on before its lost

Even if you burn your wings
Stunt your flight
You need more
Even though it doesnít need to be there
Its the light having to need to be there
That eventually kills the moth
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First__Knight
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1 posted 01-10-2000 01:27 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

I like the way you have make the cross to this and the moth.  Done well with deep thoughts.  

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"


devina
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2 posted 01-10-2000 06:32 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Addiction can be like this in many ways, glad to see you have us thinking tonight! We can only sit and wonder when the moth is going to get burned enough to finally fly away...and yes, your parallel is acurate.

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Munda
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3 posted 01-20-2000 05:53 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

I really enjoyed reading this and you did a very good job, comparing the moth with an addiction.
Nicole
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4 posted 01-20-2000 06:05 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

I think you did an excellent job creating a parallel between the two.  There are some definate similarities, that you put across quite well.  I enjoyed the read, thank you!

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
 
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