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cokey_95
Junior Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 35


0 posted 2000-01-09 06:19 PM


I told you today i couldnt do this anymore,
you looked at me and slammed the door.
You grabbed me and said you wont do this to me,
just try and leave me and you will see.
I have gave and gave but no more today,
you cry and cry and say ok, ok
I will try and change i promise i will,
I have heard this before, i swallow one more pill
I stand there and think i have taken enough,
I always thought i was so tough.
although i am no comparison to you,
Im the one who you leave black and blue.
At first i thought it was so cute that you were
overzelous,
And then it scared me that you were so jealous.
The last time i looked and smiled at a man
I came home and you swung that frying pan,
A busted jaw the dr. said as he looked at me and
shook his head,
all he could say is next time you'll be dead!
I tried to explain , nothing will ever be the same,
tonight is the night, Im done playing this game.
I swallow a handfull of these pills,
and think to myself no more hospital bills,
No more broken arms from nasty falls
no more black eyes from walking into walls.
I pick up the gun I bought yesterday,
I look in the mirror, and know there is nothing left to say..
I hear the shots and I grab for the rail,
next thing i remember i hear the sirens wail.
They all say i dont know how she took it this
long,
and now all i can hear is sweet Jesus's song.

© Copyright 2000 Karin - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 2000-01-10 12:00 PM


Girl, I just want you to tell me that you are okay, and that you are no longer in this situation....Please...I'm really worried for you.  This poem was very shocking, I understand your need to end the situation, but ending your life is not necessary.....just leave him!  I know it's not  that easy, but really, it's as easy as just grabbing a few of your things and running to someone so you can save your life!  You can always get new stuff, but you only have one life!  Don't throw it away for some jackass of a man!  No man is worth that!  Pardon my french, but this saddens me - that you would maybe give him the satisfaction of knowing you ended it all for him....Don't do that - just leave and go somewhere, anywhere safe....Be sure to stop by the police station and report him on the way too, so he doesn't do this to anyone else!  Please let me know what the status is on this, so I won't worry about you, OK?  And feel free to email me if you need to talk.....You did a wonderful job expressing all this emotion in your poem....fabulous job...I'm glad you shared it....Gennifer

 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!

First__Knight
Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678

2 posted 2000-01-10 12:04 PM


Please don't feel as if you are alone here as there are many who have shared and have lived these very same things.  I enjoyed your writing but subject matter of this is very real and I truly hope this is of the past.  Help is here.

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"



CrazyChick
Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132

3 posted 2000-01-10 01:21 AM


you always have something to live for...it's not worth it to end your life for someone like that..Please leave as soon as possible.
I know what its like in these situations...Please e-mail if you ever need to talk.....and please be careful

cokey_95
Junior Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 35

4 posted 2000-01-10 01:27 AM


To everyone..thanks for being so kind and reading all my posts..I will be ok.. I take it one day at a time and when i cant take it one day at a time i try one second at a time...thanks..
CrazyChick
Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132

5 posted 2000-01-10 01:56 AM


Glad to hear your doing ok!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
6 posted 2000-01-10 10:05 AM


This poem sent chills down my back....having been there, I understand all those feeling way to well. You are not alone though and there are people who will help. Please e-mail me if you need or want someone to talk to. One day, one step at a time is all you can do....God Bless.
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