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Tramp Poet
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Could Be Anywhere...


0 posted 01-09-2000 01:16 AM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet


God?
oh God, the tears are burning
the tears are burning my eyes
oh God, they come unbidden
they come all the time
they come when i least expect or need them.

God?
are You there, God?
canít You hear my cries
canít You see my anguish
do You really care
are You there?
God?
the pain...it hurts
i canít stand it anymore
live is not worth the living
a waste of good suffering
hey, iím crying here
God?
why donít You care
why donít You answer my prayer
why donít You protect me
why donít You provide for me
why donít You keep your promise?

God?
oh God!  Thank you, God!
please forgive all that unbelief...
just weak and doubting, God
guess i should learn to wait, huh
guess i should learn to trust, amen...
God?

D.J.Burt
9/99   Wendy Isle
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  there is only one...
Romans 10:9-10
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PhaerieChild
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1 posted 01-09-2000 01:21 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Just got home from another grueling Sat. nite at the restaurant and I come home and log in to my favorite place on the net and my brother has written a poem that really makes me feel like a heel. All nite I'm cussin' my bad misfortune and not realizing that actually I'm very blessed. I just didn't see it. Thanks Bro!!

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

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Felix
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2 posted 01-10-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for Felix   Email Felix   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Felix

You should have posted this in Spiritual Journeys....they would have appreciated it there. But all in all you put me in my place...seems like I have to keep going through this time and time again, maybe one of these days I'll learn. I think I get more aggrivated at myself for constantly mistrusting His perfect will than I do at Him for not responding immediately. Great poem!!!!

 Did you ever read about a frog who dreamed of being a king, and then became one?

- Neil Diamond

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3 posted 01-11-2000 01:22 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

A very thought-provoking poem. Of course, I read it differently than everyone else. I see the last stanza as sort of a quick-fix heal-all that doesn't really last, hence the repetition of God? which happens to be the first line of the poem, too. I'm not saying I don't believe in God, but I am saying, nothing is easy as that. Maybe I'm just bitter.   Nah, I'm too happy for that.

Thanks for the post!

Mike
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thank you for your input...
as for easy as all that
read the signature.
Tis even more simple
than protrayed...


  there is only one...
Romans 10:9-10
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5 posted 01-11-2000 01:46 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! This is excellent, D.J.! Love the ending, too!

 Denise

 
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