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Rock bottom ( for all the bums)

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Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


0 posted 01-08-2000 11:28 AM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg


I'm a nervous wreck
and I'm getting increasingly angry,
everytime I look at this worthless check.
As my money grows scarcer,
my attitude grows more fiercer.
Nobody seems to love me,
since I have no money.
A week ago, my girlfriend left me
because, I had no dough. (money)
Today, my landlawyer kicked me out the door.
He cursed me and said, "don't come back anymore!"
So I'm broke with no girl and no friends.
I feel like killing myself,
so that this terrible life could end.
You know, it's hard to support your drug habits your girl and your child.
With all these problems,
it's no wonder why I rarely smile.
An hour ago, my boss fired me
because, I had severe body hygiene.
My fellow workers had enough complaints,
to make it rain.
Now I'm on the streets,
looking like a bum and looking for food to eat.
Right now as I speak,
I'm holding up a sign that says,
"I will work for food, please help me!"
It's amazing how quickly my life is plummeting.
I must admit though, that I had it coming
but, I will stay positve
because with hard work, perservation, and good luck,
eventually I'll move up.
As of now,
I'm a bummer,
in the summer.
But by autumn,
I guarantee
that I won't be,
rock bottom.



 Nathan
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Toerag
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since 07-29-99
Posts 5839
Ala bam a


1 posted 01-08-2000 01:32 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

So Nate?...Other than your girlfriend, job and landlord....how's things?.....But yanno?...It can't get much worse....only better....Sometimes if ya think about folks with more problems than you, it can bring ya outta the dumps?...Just think?....Ya could be a damned old Toerag?.....or, heaven forbid, LongJohn or Balladeer?.....Nice job here, doubt that it's really that bad..ya have to much "sharpness" in your wit and thought...
Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


2 posted 01-08-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

My bad, I should have said that this poem isn't about me. But if you saw the title, you would see that I'm speaking for the bums out there. In fact, I'm like the voice for an actual bum that don't write poetry but I do so, my poetry is his voice that speaks. I hope you got that because it don't come clearer than that. By the way, you must have a bad life or something the way you're verbally attacking me. Well you picked the right hobby, poetry. Release all the anger and whatever else is on your mind and oh yeah, make it positve too.

 Nathan
whiskey
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since 12-28-1999
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Australia


3 posted 01-08-2000 07:33 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Nate, this is excellent its so sad that people actually are this way  I couldnt imagine how it would be, Great poem  
Quiet Lightning
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since 12-26-1999
Posts 56


4 posted 01-09-2000 12:22 PM       View Profile for Quiet Lightning   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Quiet Lightning

this poem was funny to me.i hope this poem wasn't a true story cauxe you got it bad
Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


5 posted 01-09-2000 02:02 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

People, people, people, how many times do I have to say that the poem isn't about me. I give up, I guess some just don't understand English. Before I leave on this note, I would like to thank Whiskey and Quiet lightning for responding to my poem.

 Nathan
Denise
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since 08-22-99
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6 posted 01-09-2000 08:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Nate, Toerag wasn't attacking you...you misread what he was  saying....he said you display too much 'sharpness' to be in that situation. Besides, Toe would only pick on Balladeer and LongJhn...hehehehehe...that's his job around here!!!    I understand that you are 'talking' for the 'bums' out there that can't express themselves.  A poet laureate for the underdog! I read a poem like that in one of my books last night but now I can't remember the author! I thought it was a noble idea though! I liked your poem, Nate.

 Denise

Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton


7 posted 01-10-2000 07:19 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Oh she was joking! Well I really misread her comment. Well, I'm going to apologize. Thanks for letting me know and thanks for the post!

 Nathan
Nate Dogg
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8 posted 01-10-2000 07:19 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Oh she was joking! I really misread her comment. Well, I'm going to apologize. Thanks for letting me know and thanks for the post!

 Nathan
Denise
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9 posted 01-10-2000 07:40 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You're welcome, Nate! Oh, by the way, Toerag is a 'he' not a 'she'! And a really great 'he', too!  

And I always say it takes a big man to admit a mistake and apologize...and I see that you have, so in my book you are a big man!  

 Denise

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