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It whispered I love you

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 01-08-2000 09:48 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

    It whispered I love you

As light as fairy dust, the breeze,
Loomed above my face with ease.
Passing other occupants
And touching me with transient.

It circled me breathing whisper,
Ever getting fuller crisper.
Until it laid a velvet touch.
Until it seem to me too much.

It's then I felt a bit enchanted,
Avid yet a little languid.
Receptive yet a little fearful,
Cheerful yet a little mindful.

It held me in an objects grace,
Of a warm and loving embrace.
And placed me in a stasis mood.
Were frankly I became unglued.

For I heard the lightest whisper, "I love you,"
That Pierced my heart and mind clear through.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 01-08-2000 10:01 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I absolutely had to read this one aloud Seymore...I love the way the words dance off my toung. The rhythm is great!! Nice poem, well written  
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 01-08-2000 10:13 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot,
I would love to hear that hoot from a hoot owl. *L* Sy
Michael
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3 posted 01-08-2000 10:17 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Great poem, Sy.  It has almost a tangible aspect to it, very descriptive.  Very enjoyable.

Michael
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4 posted 01-08-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

The flow of words entangled touch
soft and smooth....oh so much
As a painter i can see the canvas
Is full of "she"
As a Poet(careful now  ) )I like your ways
you make your words shine like rays
Helmut


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.
Mike
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5 posted 01-08-2000 12:06 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

You do have a way with words...
Very nicely done.
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 01-08-2000 02:12 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Michael,
Thank you for the very nice comment.
Helmut,
Thank you for the answering poem.
Mike,
And thank you for the nicely done.
devina
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7 posted 01-08-2000 02:20 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You could have painted this one across the sky with your beautiful words, you are quite a talent dear.

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 01-08-2000 02:42 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

And I whisper *this is lovely*.
Elizabeth Santos
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Marge,
So nice to see you whispering again.
Liz

Sy, This poem itself whispers, it is you that has laid a velvet touch upon the page.
Exquisite!
Liz
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10 posted 01-08-2000 03:25 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A beautiful whisper of love! Truly beautiful, Seymour!  

 Denise

Nan
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11 posted 01-08-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Well, now Sy..... Lookee this - Lots of great imagery - simile, metaphor, personification - all that good stuff..... oh - and I great poem too....
Felix
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12 posted 01-08-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Felix   Email Felix   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Felix

This poem made me feel as though I was walking barefoot through a beautifully enchanted forest!! And I consider that the best way to say "I love you"...lightly and quietly and to not make a fuss. For it's the small singly noted things that give the most meaning I think.

 Did you ever read about a frog who dreamed of being a king, and then became one?

- Neil Diamond

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13 posted 01-08-2000 07:46 PM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt


"That pierced my heart and mind clear through". You seem to be telling my story again Seymour. I know these feelings well.   Wonderful read my friend
 B Gravitt



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moonmoon
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14 posted 01-08-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon

Wow, what an enchanting accord of words...Liked much..
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15 posted 01-08-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

....and the hits keep right on rolling. A very nice touch on this one, Sy.
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WoW Sy this is wonderful so beautiful and rolls so easilly of the tongue. Well done This is great  
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17 posted 10-29-2000 08:00 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Well now sir, I have come full circle to know why
that reason I would like to whisper, aye!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ


Marge Tindal
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18 posted 03-17-2001 11:40 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

This whisper needs to be shared again !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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19 posted 07-07-2002 03:36 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

I have heard it too, Sweet Sy.
Lovely writing.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

TexUS
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A masterpiece.

Really, really enjoyed it, THANKS!
 
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