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Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
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Honea Path, SC USA

0 posted 2000-01-08 12:51 PM


While you were sleeping

While you were sleeping,
I sat by your bed.
I watched you
as you smiled through your dreams.

I traced your perfect shell ear,
Touched every curl
On your little head.

I tried to sleep
But the sound of your breathing
Drew me back to your room.

I couldn’t resist
The magic which tugged
At my heartstrings
And brought me to your side.

I settled on the floor
Once again.
Back against the wall,
Holding your tiny hand in mine.

While you were sleeping
I fell in love with you all over again.



[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 01-11-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Tara Simms - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
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1 posted 2000-01-08 12:55 PM


Tugging at heartstrings seems to be a passtime for your writing.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

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Paul Hoekman
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since 1999-12-28
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2 posted 2000-01-08 01:00 AM


Well said!
I have three little girls
and have spent many moments
checking in on them
while they sleep,
I just look at them and smile
they are so precious to me.
Paul

Julie Jordan Scott
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since 1999-09-19
Posts 146
Bakersfield, CA USA
3 posted 2000-01-08 01:43 AM


ahhhhh.....Tara, the love for our babies is the best, isn't it?

great work!

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hoot_owl_rn
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Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 2000-01-08 08:52 AM


Oh man....I'm sitting here with tears in my eyes. Oh, how I remember those days when my children were little and I'd go into their room just to watch them sleep, to touch their hair, to pull the balnkets up around them...this poem brought back so many emotions. Nicely written Tara!!
Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
5 posted 2000-01-08 10:49 AM


It's an almost undescribable feeling I get watching my children in peaceful sleep.  It truly is magic.  Captured well, Tara.

Michael

Nan
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6 posted 2000-01-08 10:50 AM


Aren't they just angelic when they're asleep? Nice job, Tara.....
Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
7 posted 2000-01-08 12:01 PM


Thank you everybody.  It is magic, the way they enrapture us.  And I love every minute of it!

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
8 posted 2000-01-08 01:16 PM


Beautiful poem. It's a true testament to your love for your baby.

 Nathan

moonmoon
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 277
TX , USA
9 posted 2000-01-08 10:25 PM


so glad I didn't miss this one Tara. What would we do without our angels? Can't imagine what life would be like without the 'shimmering radiance' that I call my daughter..

Here's to our cherubs who sculpt our lives..CHEERS  

To the top girlfriend..!!

First__Knight
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 678

10 posted 2000-01-08 10:37 PM


Oh how wonderful....I have not children   and this has brought that to mind again in the wanting of a family.  Thank you Tara

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"



Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
11 posted 2000-01-09 10:13 AM


moonmoon, cheers!

First_Knight, I hope that someday you will know the joy that children can bring into a person's life.


 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

12 posted 2000-01-10 07:46 PM


Just lovely - and a feeling many parents share I imagine.
Denise
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13 posted 2000-01-10 08:24 PM


I agree, Tara, this is lovely and magical!  

 Denise


Songbird
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Missouri
14 posted 2000-01-10 08:56 PM


A very special poem, one that I hope you will be able to share with your daughter when she grows up.
SnglDad
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 115
Seattle area
15 posted 2000-01-10 09:22 PM


It`s a shame that they grow up as fast as they do.The picture as well as your writing
has brought back many happy memories of when my kids were that young.  
I really enjoyed this,very heart warming.
Thank you for sharing.< !signature-->

 God Bless



[This message has been edited by SnglDad (edited 01-16-2000).]

Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
16 posted 2000-01-11 02:43 PM


Thank you for your comments. I wrote this for my two sons.  I have emailed a picture of my sleeping boys to Nan, who will be attaching the picture to this poem.  

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



Nan
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17 posted 2000-01-11 09:15 PM


Attached..... and they are truly adorable!!!
devina
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Posts 3539
Cali
18 posted 2000-01-11 09:29 PM


Tara, isn't it nice to see what little angels they can be WHILE they're sleeping???LOL  Good poem hun, and your two boys are ADORABLE!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

~ViXeN~
Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 93
Guelph, Ont. Canada
19 posted 2000-01-11 09:35 PM


wow i really liked this poem, and the pictures were a cute added touch! very nice!
Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
20 posted 2000-01-12 04:04 PM


Nan, thanks for posting the picture of my babies.  They are beautiful and angelic!

Vixen, welcome to Passions.  Thanks for the comments.

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



Temptress
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Mobile, AL
21 posted 2000-01-12 11:21 PM


What a wonderful poem, and a mightly adorable picture. I don't have children, but one day (in about 10 years)   when I have them I am sure I'll be just as happy.
rascalx
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since 1999-08-25
Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA
22 posted 2000-01-12 11:23 PM


Beautiful....I have three boys (who also lay all over each other when they sleep lol)..your words describe those precious feelings of parenthood so well..watching my children sleep is pure bliss..thanks for putting it to words. and the picture was a wonderful touch.
Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
23 posted 2000-01-13 01:36 AM


Oh! This is precious, a poem that tugs at the heartstrings of every parent. Very well written
LIz

Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
24 posted 2000-01-13 02:57 PM


Jeff, Temptress and Elizabeth, thank you for your comments!  They are appreciated.  I know most if not all parents probably feel the same way I do, but you know how it is.  It feels like I'm the only one who experiences the magic at watching my kids sleep.  

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



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