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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-01-07 09:06 PM



               Eden way

An armature of words desire,
She sculptures in poetic fire.
A rainbow made of minds insist,
Creating phantoms in the mist.

She flutters on wings of phrase and charm,
That brings my heart to wild alarm.
She builts a world of rhythmic rhyme,
With the foibles of grace and time.

She flies in the mist of amour,
On butterfly wings of allure.
And the residue leaves veins of goal,
That has captured my very soul.

And I am caught, her cloak of fashion,
In an unbelievable pull of passion.
It is here the vortex blinds my eyes,
It is here where the nightingale sighs.

It is here, my path to Eden way.
It is here I would lie and stay.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
whiskey
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1 posted 2000-01-07 09:23 PM


Sy, This is beautiful you are so talented , your work amazes me  
Denise
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2 posted 2000-01-07 09:28 PM


So beautiful! Lovely, lovely words! *sigh*

 Denise


hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 2000-01-07 09:36 PM


*sighs* absolutely lovely Seymore  
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 2000-01-07 10:28 PM


Sy,
This is so lovely
Your talents are unmatched
Love ya,
Liz

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2000-01-08 03:01 PM


Whisky,
Not quite as beautiful as you from your picture.

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2000-01-08 03:08 PM


Denise,
Thank you sweet Denise. *L* Sy
Hoot,
Your sigh send me a high. *L* Sy
Elizabeth,
There is a small change from the original.
A rainbow made of minds insist,
Creating phantoms in the mist.
Thank you Love Sy.

Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 2000-01-08 03:12 PM


Sy
I do love this poem so
But now I'm going on to read the new one
This is so lovely
Liz

Nan
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8 posted 2000-01-08 04:17 PM


Applause, dear Sy.... much applause...
Pepper
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9 posted 2000-01-08 05:02 PM


'Sigh' Sy....  
Gorgeous....seems I use that word alot with your pieces...

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2000-01-08 08:08 PM


Nan,
Applause from you are my dearest wish. *L* Sy
Pepper,
Your words are as beautiful as your picture.
*L* Sy

Betty Gravitt
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11 posted 2000-01-08 08:13 PM


I'll just use the same word again for it describes your poems the best way I know how.... Wonderful... Thanks Sy my friend.

 B Gravitt


Marge Tindal
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12 posted 2000-01-08 08:22 PM


Quite nicely done, Seymour.
This speaks with a soft eloquence
that flutters like the very winged
butterfly of which you speak.
~Marge~

moonmoon
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13 posted 2000-01-08 09:16 PM


Beautiful indeed Seymour. Thanks for the read..
HelmutB
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14 posted 2000-01-08 09:57 PM


To find someone to share this way
Your lucky man, what else could I say
I like the end, bravo to this conclusion
What wonderfull words in fusion
Grace covers ever line
to read it smooth is such divine
Helmut

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2000-01-08 11:42 PM


Betty,
thanks for the wonderful.
Marge,
Thank you Marge *L*
Moon,
You welcome and thank you.
Helmut,
Nice answer, nice poem, thank you.

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