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HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
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0 posted 2000-01-07 05:35 PM


Dream along the Avon River.

We walk along the bend down there by the river
The air is filled with a calming shiver
We walk the way we always went
Close to each other, hand in hand
Water covered in the streetlights silent glow
The river lies still, yet filled with flow
Swans and ducks still float along
Singing loud their evening song
The dam far in the distance
Keeping against the waters resistance
Forming a lake that lies like a mirror quiescent
Every thing seems so innocent.

The night slowly falls, the sun low upon the clearing sky
Daylights leaving slow and shy
There are trees standing tall and weeping down
There are trees carrying no crown
Aged over hundreds of years
No storm no weather fears
Red skies covering the horizon buoyant light
Curtains of night fall slow, dark, and slight
The lake lies like a mirror quiescent
Every thing seems so innocent

Old trees and branches, died long time before
Lying along the river’s shore
The smell of night is in the air
A soft wind blows from anywhere
I hold your hand, your hand that means so much
Feel your skin with gentle touch
Kept in my head a happy song
Here I want to stay. Here is where I shall belong
The lake lies like a mirror quiescent
Every thing seems so innocent

The words I spoke not so long ago
“My love.” These words are still there, but even so
I know, you follow me where ever I will go
The way we kissed that first night
Everything seemed so good, so right
The water shining, reflecting melted our soul
That night, …we found a common goal
Never will I forget when you turned and walked away
There was so much more that I had to say
The lake lies like a mirror quiescent
Every thing seems so innocent

I’m standing there with words to say
Dreaming you didn’t walked away
My heart cries out for you
“My Love don’t you know I love you too.”
You’re disappeared around the bend ahead
I’m standing there wondering what would you have said
If you only could have known what more I had to say
But you just kept walking away
The lake lies like a mirror quiescent.
Every thing seems so innocent

The lake lies like a mirror quiescent
But I’m no longer innocent
The fear to lose, what I love so dear
Why can’t you stay, why can’t you be here
My heart longs for you, to feel your gentle touch
Deep in my soul you should know, “I love you …so much”.

Helmut
September. 16.99



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

© Copyright 2000 Helmut Becker - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2000-01-07 05:40 PM


This is absolutely wonderful! I enjoyed this very much! Great ending! Welcome to Passions!< !signature-->

 Denise



[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-07-2000).]

Severn
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3 posted 2000-01-07 06:37 PM


Entrancing...beautiful work.

Welcome to Passions...

    

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath

Poet deVine
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4 posted 2000-01-07 07:09 PM


Welcome to Passions! This is a wonderful poem, I look forward to reading more from you! Please check your e-mail!  

whiskey
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5 posted 2000-01-07 07:30 PM


This is great , So wonderful , Welcome to Passions  
hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA
6 posted 2000-01-07 07:59 PM


Helmut my dear friend...you all ready know the beauty I find in this piece. It's so wonderful to see you here and posting, it made my day yesterday to see your name amoung this special group of people. Welcome to passions  
Hugs

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2000-01-07 08:35 PM


Helmut,
Enjoyed the poem, will look for more. Welcome aboard.

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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northern mountains, Idaho
8 posted 2000-01-07 09:13 PM


Poignant and haunting, this poem is lovely, and well worded.  I like the way you repeat the same line at the end of each stanza, leading to the climax.  So sad.  Thank you for sharing!



 ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG

HelmutB
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Posts 964
Canada
9 posted 2000-01-07 11:18 PM


There is simply one thing I shall must do
And this is simply to "Thank You"
You have no idea how your words make me feel
I'm glad I signed my name to the ancient reel
Words can not express how lucky i am
To find such poeple, How shall i say "A Jem"
I must tell "Hoot_owl_rn" you have been right
The hearts of people here are open wide
A special tribute goes to thee
without you Ruth there wouldn't be a me
"Sunshine" you have pushed me too
For this my "friends" I all Thank You
I hope i will do justice here
my heart goes out to you with cheer
Forgive if i don't repeat all the names as listed up above
I shall send to you all a peace full dove.
Thank you.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Paul Hoekman
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Harwinton Ct. U>S>A>
10 posted 2000-01-08 12:06 PM


Really wonderful HelmutB
I felt as though I was walking
along the same path.
I could almost smell it.
          Paul

Martie
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11 posted 2000-01-08 12:13 PM


Beautiful work Helmut.  I was taken with you into the beauty of this place and the emotion that you felt.
Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
12 posted 2000-01-08 12:54 PM


This is a beautiful poem HelmutB....
and Welcome to Passions! I look forward to enjoying much more of your work.....

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2000-01-08 05:11 AM


An excellent poem Helmut.  You described the location so well I could visualize it and I enjoyed the journey.    James
Lisa Graham-Marshall
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since 1999-12-31
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Nottingham. UK
14 posted 2000-01-08 06:44 AM


"What a lovely poem!"
   I will look forward to reading more.
                                   Lisa.

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
15 posted 2000-01-08 06:50 AM


Welcome, Helmet, to a passionate bunch of poets. I enjoyed reading your poemand look forwar to more
Liz

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
16 posted 2000-01-08 08:37 AM


Awww....Helmut, thank you once more.  
Quiet Lightning
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17 posted 2000-01-08 09:27 AM


Your poem was really good.It would be nice if you could write another one
HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
Canada
18 posted 2000-01-08 09:43 AM


Thank you to all
Note to myself: stop blushing
May your day be as bright
as the stars at night  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
19 posted 2000-01-08 10:57 AM


HelmutB, This is a beautiful poem, you captured my senses with your imagery, made me feel very serene. Welcome to Passions.
Dreamer_556
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20 posted 2000-01-08 03:37 PM


That is truely outstanding!
I enjoyed that very much  

~*Dreamer*~

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
21 posted 2000-01-10 05:05 PM


Helmut - what a wonderful way to start your on-line world at Passions...



 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
Canada
22 posted 2000-01-10 06:02 PM


Thank you Dreamer_556 and Lost Dreamer.
Thank you Sunshine   You got me hooked  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


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