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Lessons from Rock and River

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Martie
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Lessons from Rock and River

Color the canyon walls
warm adobe
fire hearths of brick
warm
places in the heart

listen

The river flows
passed hard and stable rock
two different forms of matter
each by uniqueness
gives importance to the other
a perfect relationship

Harmonize with things
that flow by you
like the rock
I think
sweep gracefully past
the stunning fact
impeding
gesture with sound
that delights  

   then

Sky dark
clouds dense charcoal
the rain stitching lines from sky to earth
in the canyon,
next to the river

Thunder trembles
the sky to open
the flowing current
steady
    pounding
the river surges
sending hard and stable rock
careening
    far

The rock
as others catch against it
changes the path
of the river
  flowing
     growing
        flooding

The worlds ever changing
nothing stays the same
I think



 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Mike
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1 posted 01-07-2000 03:18 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

How I wish I could write like that...
Pepper
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2 posted 01-07-2000 03:34 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Stunning Martie!!!!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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Two BIG thumbs up! Heck, here's even a couple of toes to boot.  Excelent writing here Martie. Like the flow and the feel.
Denise
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4 posted 01-07-2000 05:43 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great lessons here, Martie! And great writing as well!  

 Denise

Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 01-07-2000 05:49 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

There is something about the movement of water that is so mesmerizing. This is so beautiful, Martie.
I will know something more definite early next week. Will e-mail you
Liz
Martie
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Mike- Thanks for the compliment but I think that your writing is great.

Pepper-Thanks for such a great word sweety.

Scott- Thanks for the thumbs and for reading my work.

Denise- lessons are everywhere I guess--just gotta look.  Thanks for the compliment.

Liz- Water is mesmerizing for sure.  I look forward to hearing from you.
whiskey
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7 posted 01-07-2000 07:05 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is wonderful Marti , water flowing is such a lovely thing and youve put it into words so well  
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 01-07-2000 08:58 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Martie,
This one is a keeper. wonderful poem I enjoyed the read. *L* Sy
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9 posted 01-07-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Another walk in the park for you and awe from me. Stop looking it make so easy!! (No, don't!)
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Wow!!! DO think I found something though....the quality of your poetry. It's all first rate!!!
Martie
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Thank for reading Whisky and your comments

Sy, a keeper from you means alot to me

Baladeer, you walk in the park all the time.

hoot, what a wonderful thing to say.  I appreciate you reading my "stuff".

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Nate Dogg
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12 posted 01-08-2000 01:10 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Wow, I'm very so shocked at how good this poem is Martie. Keep on writing because you certainly is talented.

 Nathan
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13 posted 01-08-2000 01:55 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

How beautifully serene your
words move with the water ..
you know how much I enjoy what you write.

Thanks for the card ...
I'm feeling a little better, my friend.
~Marge~
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