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Severn
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0 posted 01-07-2000 08:57 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

~Awaken~


I know
slow
risings

fragile things
dreams perhaps
                        or feathered ripples

simple returns
and wishes
a sigh
          or two

not above me
      no
they soft
slowly

rustle me
unrevealing
of their frame

dare I

allow them near?

Turn whispery thread
of mystery

into tangibility

…I know not…

should I move
around them
just

                  shadowed

unseeing
safely

or…

awaken
          
           …awaken…

© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Paul Hoekman
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1 posted 01-07-2000 09:06 AM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

   How completly enjoyable,
  the words, the format,
     the feeling.
      LOVE IT!
       Paul
Betty Gravitt
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2 posted 01-07-2000 09:15 AM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

Awaken Severn, and enjoy.   This is beautiful. Thank you.

 B Gravitt

whiskey
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3 posted 01-07-2000 09:17 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Severn , This is wonderful   Really loved the read Thanks

Julie
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 01-07-2000 09:22 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This was truly delightful to awaken to.
Severn, I have no words left for your talents.
They seem to only get better, but I don't know how
You are amazing
Liz
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 01-07-2000 09:22 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
Well I just got up and your poem snapped my eyes open. What a delightful suprise and poem
Beautiful my dear. *L* Sy
Denise
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6 posted 01-07-2000 10:33 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Good morning, Severn! Awaken!  Beautiful poem!  

 Denise

Nicole
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7 posted 01-07-2000 10:46 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

I love the way you formatted this!  It adds so much to the poem.  Oh yes, and the poem itself is really quite superb too.  


Keep writing, I'll keep reading!  

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
Martie
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8 posted 01-07-2000 12:02 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Oh, this is so lovely Kamla.  So few words and so much beauty expressed.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Lisa Graham-Marshall
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9 posted 01-07-2000 12:06 PM       View Profile for Lisa Graham-Marshall   Email Lisa Graham-Marshall   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lisa Graham-Marshall

'Sigh'  Lovely words.
Marilyn
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10 posted 01-07-2000 12:21 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

This was wonderful Severn. Very well crafted.
Pepper
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This is beautiful and written with excellence Severn......
I love it!!!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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12 posted 01-07-2000 11:17 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

A very beautiful, dreamy poem, K, you have reason to be proud of this.
Dark Angel
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13 posted 01-07-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Most Beautiful Kamla, Excellent work, beautiful words captured me!!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Eloise
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14 posted 01-08-2000 12:17 AM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Lovely poem Kamla.  I really liked the way you layed this one out.  You do have quite the talent.  
hoot_owl_rn
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Oh Kamla...do awaken, life is too short to sleep through the best years  
Michael
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16 posted 01-08-2000 10:13 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Oh wow, this one gave me chills.  That impulsive side in me is screaming AWAKEN... but I fully know the flip side of that dilema as well.  Your imagery astounds me at times, wonderful work.

Michael
Felix
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17 posted 01-08-2000 12:51 PM       View Profile for Felix   Email Felix   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Felix

I think I would like to see your eyes. Bt that and your poetry...it would be an amazing discovery. Great work!

 Did you ever read about a frog who dreamed of being a king, and then became one?

- Neil Diamond

Nan
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18 posted 01-08-2000 03:52 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

The best part of waking up........
Severn
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19 posted 01-08-2000 05:35 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Paul - thankyou very much!

Betty - thankYOU for reading, and that is what I am trying to do.

Whiskey - Same as above! LOL  

Lizzy - Well, you know the feeling is mutual - I never do want to sound trite when telling you how much I love your latest poem - but it can't be helped because I have run out of words!   Thankyou.

Masterpoet - why thankyou, I do appreciate it!

Denise - and it is the morning! How can I not but help but awaken when I come here.   Thanks.

Satiate - you have a deal - and the same goes for you - thankyou!

Martie - thanks my friend...  

Lisa - thanks, haven't seen much of your work yet, but will be looking out for it.

Marilyn - thankyou...  

Shannon - your reading is always welcome with appreciation my friend - thankyou.

Sea - my dear, I thank you.

Dark - let us just unite in affirmation!   Thankyou my friend.

Eloise - you must also tell that to yourself OK? Thanks hon.

Ruth - LOl, I know! Thanks.  

Michael - thankyou - I knew you would understand the dilemna!

Felix - wow, really? Thanks!

Nan - hehe...  



 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 01-08-2000).]
moonmoon
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Wow K,that was breath taking indeed.
Balladeer
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21 posted 01-08-2000 10:10 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You set a wonderful mood with this poem, Kamla. By all means, awaken!
First__Knight
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Awaken me with the likes of this any morning    Wonderful

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"


Marge Tindal
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23 posted 01-09-2000 10:39 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Nice, little one.
Enjoy what you write very much.
Love ~Marge~
caroline
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24 posted 01-09-2000 11:02 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Ahhhh.....Kamla, Kween of FreeVerse      

Absolutely one of your best, friend!  Breathtaking in its loveliness  


 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


 
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