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another iron in the fire

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Tramp Poet
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Could Be Anywhere...


0 posted 01-07-2000 04:46 AM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet

Smolder

Smolder like deepest coals, she does
liquid fire dancing from crystal eyes.
Smile flashing with promise of warm lace
laughter...like virgin waterfall.

Smolder like dampest dreams, she does
awaken... aching, hour after hour.
Dreams of her skin, frozen scent
bolting straight awake, totally awake.

Smolder like terminal disease, she does
her memory haunting, no... possessing.
Her touch burning with chilling promise
a glance, then falling, forever in her spell.

Smolder like deepest coals, she does
oh... yes... she does
liquid fire dancing from crystal eyes.
Smile flashing with promise of warm lace
laughter...as another one captured.

DJBurt
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Severn
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1 posted 01-07-2000 05:10 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Fine work here - excellent use of repetition.
I find this to be an interesting line:

Smolder like terminal disease, she does
her memory haunting, no... possessing.


 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath
PhaerieChild
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2 posted 01-08-2000 02:28 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

I remember this one well dear brother. Excellent choice to post.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 01-08-2000 08:44 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very, very nicely done. I agree with Severn, the repetition really adds to this piece. Welcome to passions...looking forward to more  
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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4 posted 01-08-2000 09:57 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Intriguing, unusual and strong, this carefully worded piece really caught me.
Tramp Poet
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5 posted 01-09-2000 12:57 AM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet

Thank you all for your kindness...b


  there is only one...
Romans 10:9-10
 
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