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Untitled.......( An angry poem.)

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Moonshine
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0 posted 01-06-2000 04:47 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Have you forgotten me?
And have you moved on?
Did i mean anything at all to you?
Or was I just a bit of fun?
Do you ever think of me now?
As i think of you?
Or is your mind occupied,
With your next naive screw?
Were your sweet words lies?
And were your hugs benign?
When you weren't f*cking me,
Was I just a big waste of time?

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Severn
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1 posted 01-06-2000 04:59 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Sounds like you need some answers here...

Angry indeed.
Moonshine
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2 posted 01-06-2000 05:38 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx for your reply Severn,
Yup you're right - but I got the answers and things are different now : )
Dark Angel
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3 posted 01-06-2000 07:55 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Moonshine, WOW, alot of hate here. I guess I would've felt the same. glad that things are different now  
Great poem!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Toerag
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4 posted 01-06-2000 08:35 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Moonshine...I know how ya feel...women do this to me all the time?...Why, it happened over 10 times in the last two weeks?....I've been drinking moonshine ever since?....Nice poem..and I would think most everyone could relate to this....
Moonshine
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5 posted 01-06-2000 08:54 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx for your comment DA,
NO WAY!!!!!!! Definately not hate - I could never ever hate this person - was just confusion and lack of communication that made me think that way. This person is still in my life and means a lot to me.
Moonshine
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6 posted 01-06-2000 08:57 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx for your reply Toe - moonshine ever since huh?
hoot_owl_rn
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Sorry you feel this way moonshine....but I think we all have from time to time  
LngJhnAg
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8 posted 01-06-2000 02:00 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

I liked the short, to-the-point statements in this poem.  It came out as being direct and forceful.  Very nicely written.  I sent a copy to Toerag, and he must have thought you were writing to him because Toerag sent me the answers to all your questions:

Who?
Nope.
Of course you did.
Fun???  Ya think talking 'bout relationships is fun???!!!
Everytime I'm out with old what's-her-name.
Ya think of me?  (perk)
Hey!  Don't go putting down naive women, ya hear?
They were little white lies, so that's OK.  Right?
Benign?  Sweet thang, the way your hooters poked me in the chest, those hugs were NOT benign!
Certainly NOT a waste of time (except after that last time when I knew I wasn't going to get lucky anymore).

I think you need to really tear into that Toerag fella and teach him a lesson.  Whatta ya think?

Moonshine
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9 posted 01-06-2000 11:29 PM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx for your reply Hoot,
I don't feel this way anymore. Things have changed a lot since I wrote this poem : )
Moonshine
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10 posted 01-06-2000 11:41 PM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx for your reply lngjhnAg,
LOL yeah gonna totally rip into him! Naw - it was a good laugh and I'm not a violent girl lol I think that it was direct and forceful also - I write best when I write with emotion and at the time this is what came out of my pen : )
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