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To Sy - Thank You

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 01-06-2000 02:29 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

THANK YOU

Thank you for the lesson learned
Of tersets strangely rhymed and versed
A victory that was duly earned

A villanelle is phrases churned
In rhymes repeated and reversed
Thank you for the lesson learned

The first one got my ego burned
It was a flop, but not the worst
A victory that was duly earned

Your deed will some day be returned
My favors I will give you first
Thank you for the lesson learned

I think the pattern has been learned
But needs to be some more rehearsed
A victory that was duly earned

You've been so patient and concerned
With this wierd form we've all been cursed
Thank you for the lesson learned
A victory that was duly earned

Elizabeth
(just kidding about the ego part)

© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 01-06-2000 03:09 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Seems someone learns quickly  
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 01-06-2000 03:22 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Hoot,
My, you are a night owl, aren't you?
It's 3:20 in the morning! I had trouble sleeping, and was haunted by this stupid verse. Now I still owe Balladeer one, but better subject matter is in order
Thanks, Hoot
CrazyChick
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3 posted 01-06-2000 03:26 AM       View Profile for CrazyChick   Email CrazyChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CrazyChick

Great poem!!!
Severn
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4 posted 01-06-2000 04:50 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

LOL! You ARE happy - which is so good to see!

You even write poetry about the process of writing poetry...tchtch...to new heights do I aspire!

K
Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 01-06-2000 08:37 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thank you,crazy chick, and welcome to the Passionate School of Poetry!

Severn, Thank you for being so on top of things. Now dear, where is that rhyming verse you promised us? I have been very patiently waiting. That is what would make me happy.
Love ya,
Liz

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-06-2000).]
Sunshine
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6 posted 01-06-2000 02:17 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Well done, Elizabeth - this is a form that leaves me running in the other direction...

Good Job!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 01-06-2000 03:21 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
Your happiness and cheerful mood,
Feeds my soul asthetic food.
There cannot be a warmer drink,
Than your cheeks, so rosy pink.
Love Sy
Ps. Thank you for the beautiful words.
Severn
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8 posted 01-07-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Liz - may I confess it isn't even started - I don't even have a topic!!!!!!

Got any suggestions?

LOL - hugs my friend.


Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 01-07-2000 09:12 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Kamla,
I never start with a topic
I always start with a phrase that's in my head and the poem takes me where it wants to go. How about:
"What are your pleasures, what do you desire
What would you have me do to light the fire"
ha,ha,ha
This didn't go at all where I thought it was going!
How about simply,
"What are your pleasures"
Is that a "topic"?
Liz
Severn
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10 posted 01-27-2000 07:56 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

LIZZY!
I AM sorry - I never saw this! Twas when I was away...What are your pleasures...I think I will try that indeed - but you will probably have to wait more!!

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
 
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