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CrazyChick
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0 posted 2000-01-06 02:11 AM



              Please come back

I scream out your name
but your not there
you've been gone for some time now
but i just now see
how much i need and want you in my life

I want to have the chance to apologize
I want to tell you how much I love you
I want to tell you what a great friend you were to me
I want you to know how much you meant to me
and how you made me become a better person inside
I just want the chance to say goodbye
I just want one more day

I miss you so much!

© Copyright 2000 CrazyChick - All Rights Reserved
whiskey
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1 posted 2000-01-06 02:40 AM


Wonderful poem , Welcome to passions  

devina
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Cali
2 posted 2000-01-06 02:42 AM


Welcome to passions, you've got some great thoughts here, just a suggestion, this would read more smoothly if you rearranged em a bit. Point taken none the less!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Bojopy
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3 posted 2000-01-06 02:44 AM


Welcome to passions!! Missing someone is the worst feeling in the world but talking about it is the best thing.  At least that is what I have learned.  You found a home here!!!1
CrazyChick
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4 posted 2000-01-06 02:57 AM


Thank you everyone!    this is one of my first poems so i was a little nervous about it   )
Severn
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5 posted 2000-01-06 04:58 AM


It is quite a scary thing posting one of your first poems...I still remember mine! This is great - and welcome to our family...

    

K

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath

Moonshine
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6 posted 2000-01-06 05:49 AM


Great poem Crazy Chick!
You express yourse;f very well : )

Paul Hoekman
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7 posted 2000-01-06 08:15 AM


You don't seem all that crazy to me!
but if YOU do you are in the right place
and WECOME ! !
                  Paul

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8 posted 2000-01-06 09:04 AM


When I lost my mother I learned, the hard way, that we can never count on having a tomorrow... and unsaid words can haunt us as much as words hurled in anger and later regretted. Well done... and welcome!
CrazyChick
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9 posted 2000-01-07 09:56 PM


Thank you everyone!
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