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To Love Again (Written with my dear friend Marilyn)

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hoot_owl_rn
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To Love Again (Written with Marilyn)

A shattered heart can never love again,
Or so that’s what I tried to tell myself.
At times it's hard to not look where you've been,
Loss of another meant a loss of self.

Alas my heart behind these hard, cold walls,
Lay suffocating, paralyzed in fright.
No warmth could penetrate the empty halls.
No crack was found to let in the dim light.

Then you appeared before the mornings dawn,
And I, confused at all the warmth I felt,
Drew nearer scared and cautious like a fawn;
About to bolt, when at my feet you knelt.

Although I swore to never love again,
You pierced my heart of stone with just your pen.


Marilyn...we compliment each other well, thank you for all the help. I enjoyed this, we'll have to do it more often. Love you my friend.    


 When you truly know the meaning
of the word Love,
you will also know the meaning
of the word Pain
~Javan




[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 01-06-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Hoot and Marilyn,
A beautiful poem, you work well together.
I enjoyed the read and will look for more.
*L* Sy
Marilyn
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T'was my pleasure Ruth. This piece was little effort for me. It must have been because of whom I was writing with. I too love you my friend. ((HUG))
WhtDove
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Ruth this was beautiful, Marilyn you also! Fantastic, I love it!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


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4 posted 01-05-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

The format has been adhered to well with this piece and the message comes across clearly. 'Tis a work done well.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


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5 posted 01-05-2000 10:13 PM       View Profile for Sharleen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sharleen

Great job you two. Will you be writing another one together???? If so WHEN?

                        sharleen
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Wow! This is fantastic!  
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Such beautiful verse! Sooooooo beautiful!  

 Denise

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Ladies, ladies, applause ! : )
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Definitely a successful collaboration. You are quite a pair!
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10 posted 01-05-2000 11:48 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Ruth and Marilyn, this is so very beautiful. Looking forward to reading more of your works together  )

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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Great poem    i really enjoyed it!!!    )
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Wondeful poem you girls , A pleasure to read  
neitham
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Ruth & Marylyn!
Good reading, equally good theme. Keep it up guys!


neitham
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This is great - Marilyn, you've come far in a short time.  I know you prefer your prose... Ruth - you do certainly complement each other well....

You asked for input, Marilyn - I have only two suggestions that I would implement if it were my poem (and it's not)..

1 - I would change either the first or third line to make them rhyme. Either line could be changed easily. "Despair" rhymes nicely with "repair".... There are many others you could use as well.

2 - The line "Lay suffocating, in it's par'lized fright." could easily be adjusted to avoid the contraction.... How about "Lay suffocating paralyzed in fright"?

Tha's all folks....... I like the theme here - it's a very realistic one - aren't we all subject to this one??... Nice job ladies...
Martie
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Very well done--lovely
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Thankyou all for your kind remarks. Ruth and I do work well together. Being more of a prose writer then poetry, these forms come difficult to me.

Nan..thankyou for your suggestions and your compliments. I will have to see about catching another of your classes. They have helped me greatly.

Ruth...Some how in writing this with you I have found my muse back. Finally I have finished that prose piece I have been working on for weeks. Posting it this morning, I hope it is not as bad as I think...lol. At least it is finished!!
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I curtsey to you both....you two do beautiful work together...Kudos and  
Marilyn, I'm off to read your new piece......whoosh.....

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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Nan....laughing, that's definately my blunder in the first stanza....will take all the credit for that one and change it now...the mistake comes from the fact this WAS NOT started as a sonnet. And yes, I like the other suggestion too...thanks for your comments and your praise.

EVERYONE....thanks so much for your eager acceptance of our work

Marilyn...I'm glad to have been of some help with the muse, will wonder over to check it out. I loved doing this with you, thank you.

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 01-06-2000).]
Elizabeth Santos
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Hoot and Marilyn,

Two thumbs up
Winners cup
Takes first prize
Smiling eyes
Thanking you
Poets two
Two in one
Job well done
To sum it up
Two thumbs up

Liz

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Wonderful work girls! Will we be seeing more of you working together??
Tamera
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Pure class in  your both.....

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"


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such a lovely piece, like a sad symphony with a happy ending!

Corinne
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Enjoyed the read very much.. I wonder if I can guess who wrote or contributed which parts. It does meld into a whole and the content is strong. Thanks
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Thanks everyone  

Manalive...I'd like to see some guesses!!!!!

Denise....shhhhh....as you know a bit...lol
 
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