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Measuring Distance |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Measuring Distance How can I gage the empty place where your head pressed and that sweet perfume of sleep the soft muted sound of night I am cold without the cover of your warmth and the listening curve of your back the touch of concern even as you sleep if I sigh The years have engraved your face in this room The blanket of night descends and I find the goblins I listed in my childhood waiting for this lonesome moment to make a small sound that tucks into my reflection I am the master of my thoughts but you are the keeper and I miss the intimate knowledge that you have the key < !signature--> In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Touching and tender, Martie. Well done, as always!  Denise |
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Sharleen Junior Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 16 |
Great job. Couldn't do it any better. Very touching. lol'sharleen |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I have just read this poem to others and they agree with me....you are fabulous! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh Martie...and the listening curve of your back Wow - I love that. I love that - and the whole poem. K'...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
So sweet and a wonderful poem , I like it |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
*bows in humble adoration of your words* Excellent verse. I absolutely love this: "I am the master of my thoughts but you are the keeper and I miss the intimate knowledge that you have the key" |
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CrazyChick Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132 |
very well written, that was beautiful!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you Denise for reading what I write and your sweet replies. Sharleen--Thank you for your comment and for the read Balladeer--your fabulous response was so appreciated. Severn--thanks for all the possitive comments you make to my work--(free to travel to Calif.?) Whiskey--Thank you, I have been enjoying your poetry as well Ruth--I am the one that bows to you--thank you so much |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, You've left me speechless in the feeling of alone. You are a wonderful writer, Martie, I've been saying that all along, but yet I'm always stunned with each new piece. I hope to see you soon Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Crazychick--sorry I missed you before, thanks so much for your read and comments. Liz--Your compliment has made my day, thank you! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Very nice Ms. Martie....great job as usual... |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
Martie... I have sent your poem to a very special someone in my life. Thank you for sharing this with us. Beautiful, and wonderful. B Gravitt |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Man! Martie - If I had known women feel this way, I would have been much more careful where I slept - lol. Seriously, though - this poem was wonderful for the feelings it brought out - this is a true work of art. I sincerely hope you are not going through this right now. The melancholy tone was haunting. I loved the lines: The blanket of night descends and I find the goblins I listed in my childhood waiting for this lonesome moment to make a small sound that tucks into my reflection. This is such an incredibly vivid description of loneliness and loss. I love every word. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yea....if LongJohn wouldda known "women" felt like this..he wouldn't have wasted all that time at the YMCA snuggling to Bruce and Fred and Balladeer.... [This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem, Martie!!! And so very well done! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Toe-thanks so much for the compliment and for reading. Betty-I am honored that you would want to send this to someone. Thank you And LJ, yes, I think many women feel like this, don't men? Yes, I am going through this right now, but it is only temporary. Thanks for your concern and for the wonderful comments. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks suthern, I didn't see you there. Appreciate your reading. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
"The years have engraved your face in this room" This is exceptional writing Martie and an equisite poem... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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