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Measuring Distance

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Martie
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  Measuring Distance


How can I gage the empty place
where your head pressed
and that sweet perfume of sleep
the soft muted sound of night

I am cold without
the cover of your warmth
and the listening curve of your back
the touch of concern
even as you sleep
if I sigh

The years have engraved
your face in this room

The blanket of night descends
and I find the goblins I listed
in my childhood
waiting for this lonesome moment
to make a small sound
that tucks into my reflection

I am the master of my thoughts
but you are the keeper
and I miss the intimate knowledge
that you have the key




 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-06-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 01-05-2000 09:54 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Touching and tender, Martie. Well done, as always!  

 Denise

Sharleen
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Great job. Couldn't do it any better.
Very touching.

lol'sharleen

 
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3 posted 01-05-2000 10:04 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I have just read this poem to others and they agree with me....you are fabulous!
Severn
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4 posted 01-06-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Oh Martie...and the listening curve of your back

Wow - I love that.
I love that - and the whole poem.

K

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath
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5 posted 01-06-2000 02:58 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

So sweet and a wonderful poem , I like it  
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*bows in humble adoration of your words* Excellent verse. I absolutely love this:
"I am the master of my thoughts
but you are the keeper
and I miss the intimate knowledge
that you have the key"

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7 posted 01-06-2000 03:06 AM       View Profile for CrazyChick   Email CrazyChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CrazyChick

very well written,  that was beautiful!!!
Martie
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8 posted 01-06-2000 10:39 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Thank you Denise for reading what I write and your sweet replies.

Sharleen--Thank you for your comment and for the read

Balladeer--your fabulous response was so appreciated.

Severn--thanks for all the possitive comments you make to my work--(free to travel to Calif.?)

Whiskey--Thank you, I have been enjoying your poetry as well

Ruth--I am the one that bows to you--thank you so much
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 01-06-2000 12:45 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Martie,
You've left me speechless in the feeling of alone. You are a wonderful writer, Martie, I've been saying that all along, but yet I'm always stunned with each new piece. I hope to see you soon
Liz
Martie
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10 posted 01-06-2000 03:09 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Crazychick--sorry I missed you before, thanks so much for your read and comments.

Liz--Your compliment has made my day, thank you!
Toerag
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11 posted 01-06-2000 03:14 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Very nice Ms. Martie....great job as usual...
Betty Gravitt
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12 posted 01-06-2000 03:23 PM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

Martie...
I have sent your poem to a very special someone in my life. Thank you for sharing this with us. Beautiful, and wonderful.


 B Gravitt


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Man!  Martie - If I had known women feel this way, I would have been much more careful where I slept - lol.  Seriously, though - this poem was wonderful for the feelings it brought out - this is a true work of art.  I sincerely hope you are not going through this right now.  The melancholy tone was haunting.  I loved the lines:

The blanket of night descends
and I find the goblins I listed               in my childhood
waiting for this lonesome moment                to make a small sound
that tucks into my reflection.

This is such an incredibly vivid description of loneliness and loss.  I love every word.
Toerag
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Yea....if LongJohn wouldda known "women" felt like this..he wouldn't have wasted all that time at the YMCA snuggling to Bruce and Fred and Balladeer....

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 01-06-2000).]
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15 posted 01-06-2000 03:54 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Great poem, Martie!!! And so very well done!
Martie
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Toe-thanks so much for the compliment and for reading.

Betty-I am honored that you would want to send this to someone.  Thank you

And LJ, yes, I think many women feel like this, don't men?  Yes, I am going through this right now, but it is only temporary.  Thanks for your concern and for the wonderful comments.
Martie
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Thanks suthern, I didn't see you there.  Appreciate your reading.
Pepper
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  "The years have engraved
   your face in this room"  
This is exceptional writing Martie and an equisite poem...


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


 
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