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The Breaking Point

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Denise
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0 posted 01-05-2000 08:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise




Your muteness thunders loud within my head
The volume’s up as high as it can go
My nerves so taut they’re fragile as fine thread
If broken now how can these fingers sew?

A word or two is really all I need
To weave a tapestry would be delight
You cruelly turn away although I plead
The end of painful quiet’s not in sight.

Not golden is this silence that I find
Lush ponderings quite threadbare they have worn
Companion once, why are you now unkind?
You’ve rent in two my soul, the fabric torn.

Return again and quell my rising fear
That soon I’ll plagiarize ol’ Balladeer.  

    




 Denise





[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-06-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Denise - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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1 posted 01-05-2000 09:02 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Denise this seemed sad, and I could relate to this, and then the end  LOL!!  You go get em girl!  

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


Martie
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2 posted 01-05-2000 09:07 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I could feel the tension of silence here Denise--very well told.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 01-05-2000 09:21 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Well Denise, you've written a wonderful poem about your writer's block, and that's a good subject to write about, and your poetry is beautiful no matter what the topic
Liz
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4 posted 01-05-2000 10:59 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Man...why can't I have writers block that's so productive  
RobertB
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5 posted 01-05-2000 11:33 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Relax and enjoy writer's block Denise. Go back and look over old poems you wrote and see how you would/could change them.

I think writer's block is like a couple wanting a child so badly they can't conceive. Once they adopt and relax...they can have a dozen of their own!

Robert
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6 posted 01-05-2000 11:48 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you Rebecca, Martie, Elizabeth, Ruth and Robert for reading and commenting!


Robert- Relax? Whaaas that? hehehehehe OK I'll try! Hey isn't that a contradiction?! Trying to relax ? hehehe  

Goodnight everybody!
I am getting sooooooooo relaxed right about now!  

 Denise

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7 posted 01-05-2000 11:56 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Denise, my dear, I did not understand
My words of verse could be a magic wand
With power to take you by the gentle hand
And lead to joy and pleasure and beyond.

If I had know my absence struck you so
I would have filled the page with words of rhyme
I'd raze the dam and let the river flow
Instead of being guilty of this crime.

Sleep well, my friend, and you may rest assured
That I'll be here creating newfound rhyme
And, for the pain and torture you've endured,
I'll fill your heart with ballads in no time.
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8 posted 01-05-2000 11:58 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I chose the second version, Denise. hehe  
devina
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9 posted 01-06-2000 12:37 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Denise, your poem speaks of me too...It seems that while in love, they flowed good, in heartache, even BETTER, and now, eh~~not so good.  May your words return, so that you can e-mail me some too!LoL

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Severn
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Honestly - without a dose of W B, we just wouldn't appreciate it so much (the writing that is!)

LOL - you have just added to Balladeer's big head...gotta watch that!

Ye did well with this, Denise.

K

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath
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Only at Passions will someone with writer's block complain about it in a perfectly crafted Shakespearean Sonnet.....   
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Gee...thanks loads Denise....You've motivated Balladeer to write more?...I hope he's found something really "different" to write about than me.....LOL
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Thanks, Balladeer! Your poem captures it well! Raze that dam and let it flow!  

Devina- Thanks! Hey, maybe we could start a writer's block workshop! hehehehe  

Severn- Thanks! You are probably right! I know I certainly appreciate any glimmer of inspiration that comes my way, so much more that I did when I was writing a poem or two a day!  

Nan- Thanks! I have you to thank for introducing me to the sonnet! I think it has become my favorite form!  

Toe- Sorry! What can I say? The man inspires me! Run for cover, the dam is being razed and here come the flood waters! hehehehe  

Thanks again, everybody!

 Denise

 
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