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Black Girl Lost ( a deep poem!)

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Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


0 posted 01-05-2000 05:18 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

I wasn't ready to release this one yet but, it looks like I have to since I can't get my suicide poem on this board and I haven't heard one explanation from the moderators yet. By the way, this poem isn't about anybody in particular.

She's young and beautiful.
She's smart, energetic, kind,
and she had her own piece of mind.
I met her in a restaurant.
And even then, she seemed to know what she wanted.
She was a freshman in college,
studying computer science.
She had lots of knowledge
and she expressed it with great defiance.
She was confident and ambitious,
as her life seemed to be headed toward the life of the richest.
Yeah, she had a bright future ahead of her
but she let the no-no's of life mislead her.
She started hanging out with people,
who were not her equal.
She just let guys use her and leave.
I wondered why she was being so naive!
She started drinking and doing drugs.
She started hanging out late,
eventually missing school on the next day.
One day, I asked her, "why she was acting this way?"
She just shrugged her shoulders
and left with nothing to say.
I hated to see her this way.
She was black queen and I was her king
and our love, used to to be everthing.
She locked out everybody she knew before.
Now this, was too hard for me to ignore.
Even though she didn't want to be bothered,
I would still tell her that, "I loved her."
Her school thang wasn't going to good.
She was catching the devil,
like I knew that she would.
Her grades were so low,
that she dropped out of school.
For a while, she played cool
and came back to school.
She pulled her grades up and finished school
but, just barely though.
I congradulated her efforts
but, she treated me as if I was a dirty leopard.
She was doing all the things that held her back.
I told her that crack,
was something that she needed to lack.
But, she wouldn't listen to anybody else
so, she'll just have to learn the hard way her self.
She tried to get a summer job
because, times wre getting very hard.
She got interviewed by a guy named, Mr. Lime
but, he was thinking about sex the whole time.
It was the typical day that a black girl goes through,
going home and wondering next what she's gonna do.
She eventually got a job at a strip club,
where her nice body got much love.
She was a free-lancer,
as well as a good top-less dancer.
Everytime I see her dancing top-less in her draws,
I tell myself, "Man look,there goes another black girl lost!"


 Nathan
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Poet deVine
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since 05-26-99
Posts 25869
Hurricane Alley


1 posted 01-05-2000 05:22 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Nate! I sent you an ICQ message! I'll send an email right now!
Denise
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since 08-22-99
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2 posted 01-05-2000 05:31 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Sometimes people only learn the hard way. Very sad but true.  

 Denise

hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


3 posted 01-05-2000 06:10 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nate...sometimes we just have to find our own way.
Deborah
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since 01-03-2000
Posts 41


4 posted 01-05-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Deborah   Email Deborah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deborah

Nate,
I know what it's like to lose someone to the bad crowd. One of my best friends started drinking and doing drugs in high school. She was a bright and wonderful person and certainly could have led a great life, but she just wasn't strong enough to turn away from the wrong croud. There was nothing I or anyone else could do.  I tried so hard to make her realize that she was throwing her life away.  When she started missing school and then droped out later I lost contact.  I still have her phone number and wonder sometimes if she still lives there and what became of her.  It is so sad to lose someone like that, it was almost as if she died.  Thank you for sharing your poem, it made me remember the past.
          Deborah
Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


5 posted 01-05-2000 08:57 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you all for the comments! And thank you Debroah for that lengthy post!

 Nathan
whiskey
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since 12-28-1999
Posts 1302
Australia


6 posted 01-06-2000 03:18 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Nate,
Its a shame that people fall in with the wrong croud somepeople are just too nice and wonderful people to waste them selves on drugs , I lost my best friend to herion when I was 17 and I never knew untill it was too late and he died in my arms waiting for the ambulance, Thank you for sharing this poem

Julie
JamesMichael
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since 11-16-1999
Posts 31622
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA


7 posted 01-06-2000 04:34 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Hi Nate,  I think you really did a good job with this one.  It displays lots of truth about the dark side of life.  James

She used sex, drugs, and alcohol
and she never considered the cost.
So sad the price she'd pay
to become the black girl who's lost.


Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


8 posted 01-06-2000 07:05 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you Whiskey and James for the comments.
Hey, Whiskey, you should make a poem about your friend. And thank you James for the mini-poem.

 Nathan
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