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Interstate Musings (repost from CA)

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jbouder
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While struggling up an Appalachian hill
my ’83 Toyota 4x2’s
2-barrelled, aluminum blocked 2.2’s
whirring complaint prompts my pedantic muse
to yank my drumstick/pen, against my will,
from tapping out my grand accompaniment
to Santana’s riff.

An ATM receipt serves as my parchment and
a chewed up, black-inked, PaperMate, my quill.

As I breathe deeply, my lungs take their fill
of  engine’s vaporous, gasoline effuse
(I forgot to change that gasket).  Static subdues
Ricky Martin’s “Vida Loca” and what ensues  
(a petty pleasure, I admit) is an evil thrill
at the yawning ravine’s grand accomplishment.
Laughing, I thank God.    

The temperature gauge needles to
the red and I crank the heat higher still.

One last swallow of lukewarm coffee swill,
I toss my polystyrene cup refuse
to the floor just as the radio spews
“…skin the color mocha…”.  I pay my dues
For being cruel to Ricky and start uphill
to seek a culinary establishment
to staunch my stomach’s growl.

An epiphany!

Dunkin’ Donuts appears above the hill!
Flea banishes static with his base’s thews
as the Red Hot Chili Peppers infuse
my drumstick/pen with new power to bruise
the steering wheel.  I pull off to refill
on caffeine and, in contented wonderment,
proceed to savor life.


 Jim

"If I rest, I rust."  - Martin Luther



[This message has been edited by jbouder (edited 01-05-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Jim Bouder - All Rights Reserved
Seaangel
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1 posted 01-05-2000 05:06 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

This had me laughing and moved and laughing and moved!! I love this one.
Corinne
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2 posted 01-05-2000 05:10 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

What a wonderful, wild ride, jbouder!

Corinne
Denise
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3 posted 01-05-2000 05:15 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very entertaining, Jim! I enjoyed this!

 Denise

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 01-05-2000 06:17 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

ROFL...not at the poem Jim, but at the fact I've written a number of poems driving 65 miles an hour down the interstate on backs of ATM reciepts, grocery reciepts, napkins....whatever I could get my hands on at the time. I now carry a notebook with me at all times. I find when driving I sometimes reflect more, get inspired by thoughts or sights, and need to write the words before I lose them Good poem my friend...and YES!!!! free verse too                                         

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jbouder
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5 posted 01-06-2000 07:13 AM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

Thanks everyone:

Ruth:  

This is not free-verse, oh great teacher.  If you look closer you will see it is a Bouderian Quatroseptet (a coinage from Jenni in CA) with a rhyme scheme of abbbacd/ea/abbacf/ga/abbbach/i/abbbacj.  

Thanks again, all, for the comments and, Ruth, I take no offense at the the suggestion that this was free-verse.  Again   .

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

Nan
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6 posted 01-06-2000 09:44 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I love it - I really love it - I simply love it... I wish I writ it......um... rote it.... um...had writ.... wish my quill spilled this'un....
jbouder
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7 posted 01-06-2000 03:11 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

Not many posts but, what is this?  Three Moderators/Members Emeritus?  What an honor!

Nan:

Glad you liked it.  Just trying to make my teacher proud.  

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

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8 posted 01-06-2000 03:38 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Let's make it four! I think it's great! I've gotten to be pretty adept with that drumstick/pen, too, on occasion....my temperature needle has a steady home on red...and a fresh cup of coffee can definitely make the world seem a better place. Thanks for the feelings.
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9 posted 01-07-2000 08:53 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Will a senior soon to be emeritus member do? LOL@YOU!

Jim - I don't know - that's purty complicated rhyming like.

Yuk - Ricky Martin - only flaw my friend...hehe - I will reprimand you in CA!
Mind you the 'being cruel to Ricky' made up for the mention...

Excellent! Well thought out - lots of effort.

K


 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath
jbouder
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Balladeer:

Thanks for the compliments and your welcome on the "feelings".  Moderators everywhere!

Severn:

No ... I'm afraid Senior Members just won't do.  Post again when you reach Member Emeritus status. lol.     Thanks for the reply.

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

whiskey
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11 posted 01-07-2000 10:01 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is great , wonderful poem full of laughs and moving thoughts  
 
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