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Dreamer_556
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0 posted 2000-01-05 02:18 PM


Confrontation

The sorrow that I feel is deeper than the darkest ocean.
The questions I need answered are higher than the highest mountain.
My imagination runs wild, playing tricks with my mind.
I sense things that I cannot see, making me quiver with fear.
Dark images formed in my head project on every corner.

He’s chasing after me like an evil creature of the night.
Running fast, I am reaching dead ends; soon I will be confronted.
Loud shouts, clumsy footsteps echo treacherously around me.
I know I am guilty, I know I cannot hide forever.
Yet I shall keep running, until one day I am found by him.

Please let me know what you think, and any ways I can improve this! I am proud to say - this is now my second piece!  

~*Dreamer*~



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Denise
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1 posted 2000-01-05 02:44 PM


I am not a poetry critic, Dreamer, but I think this is magnificent! Wow..your second poem! You sure are talented!  

 Denise


Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
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state of confusion
2 posted 2000-01-05 05:41 PM


Another good one, Dreamer!  Just hope you really arent being chased by this mysterious something!

Corinne

Kid Pedestal
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since 2000-01-04
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Chandler, Arizona
3 posted 2000-01-05 05:45 PM


Your poem is almost a reflection of my thoughts, and so holds a great respect in my mind.  

Dreamer_556
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since 2000-01-04
Posts 34

4 posted 2000-01-06 01:50 PM


Thank you, yet again, for replying!

Corinne.. I think the mysterious 'something' I am running from is my conscience !!

Denise, thank you very much for that kind comment! I find it very hard for people to take me seriously due to my age, so thank you ALL very much.

Kid Pedestal, I hope you are made to feel as welcome as I was!

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