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Not Thinking Clear

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Denise
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0 posted 01-05-2000 12:21 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise



Yes, the morning dawns yet once again
Like so many countless times before
But yet so unlike those others when
Bright beams of love would ever pour
From your dear heart; now…nevermore.

As I sit here by myself, alone
Oh, I have the grandest news to share
And not thinking clear, I grab the phone
Then realize…you are not there
No, you are not there…anymore.

I was driving down the Boulevard
Oh, just a few days or so, ago
And not thinking clear, I turned toward
That way I always used to go…
But you are not home…anymore.

Yes, my time with you was far too brief;
No, I wasn’t ready to let go
My heart is burdened ‘neath my grief
And yearning for that ‘time-ago’
When you were there, yes…evermore.

Yes, the world goes on since you’ve been gone
Yes and still the seasons come and go
But I’ll never know another dawn
Like those dawns that I used to know
When you were here, no…nevermore.

11/98



 Denise

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Marilyn
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1 posted 01-05-2000 12:44 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Oh Denise. This was so very lovely, sad but lovely. It pulled at my heart. Beautifully written my friend.
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Oh Denise...so sad, yet so beautiful. Your repetition here adds to the poem a great deal. I really like what you have done with this.

Oh....by thw way, I had to read this one as soon as I saw the title....because you and the words "Not Thinking Clear" didn't compute with me. I think you are probably one of the clearest thinkers I have known.

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 01-05-2000).]
Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 01-05-2000 01:26 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Denise, Very beautifully written
Liz
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4 posted 01-05-2000 02:29 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thanks so much, Marilyn, Ruth and Elizabeth for your kind comments. I wrote this during the long dark period of grieving after my father passed away. Writing sure helped ease the pain.

Ruth, wow, thanks for that compliment! I never thought of myself that way!

 Denise

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Denise,
I understand how you must have felt. I felt the same when my uncle passed away unexpectedly.
Beautifully expressed! Really captures the feelings.

~*Dreamer*~
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6 posted 01-05-2000 04:13 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thanks for reading and commenting, Dreamer. It is appreciated!  

 Denise

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7 posted 01-05-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

beautiful, d, this moved me.
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Denise: My heart goes out to you sweetheart. I know those 'not thinking clear' times so well.

Big HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

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9 posted 01-05-2000 05:26 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Very moving piece, Denise!  We definitely lose parts of ourselves, sometimes some of the best parts, when those that we love depart from our lives.

The only comfort lies in faith that we will be with them again one day, and that they are there with us in spirit.

Corinne
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10 posted 01-05-2000 06:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, Seaangel, Rainbow and Corinne for reading and for your warm comments! They are appreciated! Yes, Corinne, we do lose a part of ourselves, that's a great way to explain what happens.

 Denise

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11 posted 01-05-2000 06:33 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is a beautiful expression Denise and very well written.
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12 posted 01-05-2000 06:36 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

A great poem Denise and I agree with Ruth..your repetition adds something special. I like it very much.
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13 posted 01-05-2000 08:12 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, Martie and Munda, for your kind responses. I'm glad you liked it!

 Denise

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Denise you've done a wonderful job on this. It really shows the longing and the missing of one you love. sniff, sniff, with a big ol' tug at the heartstrings.

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Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

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15 posted 01-05-2000 08:38 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Dysnder, you've expressed your feelings so well on this piece! This is a classic!

 Nathan
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16 posted 01-05-2000 09:34 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, Rebecca and Nate for your warm comments!

 Denise

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17 posted 01-05-2000 09:57 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Denise, this one pulled on the heart strings.  Very beautifully done.  And here's a ((HUG)) for you.
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Thanks for your kind comments, Eloise. They are appreciated!

 Denise

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19 posted 01-06-2000 12:22 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Geez, Denise, you can really tug at the heart. This is the greatest use of the word "nevermore" since Edgar Allen Poe. A beautiful piece.
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Denise - this reminds me a lot of some of the poems my grandmother wrote to my grandfather after we lost him.... a bit of nostalgia here for sure....Very nicely done...
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Very nicely done sweetie...oh, and join the club...I haven't thought clearly in years...maybe ever?
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So full of sadness... Very well done!!!
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Thank you, Balladeer, Nan, Toerag and Suthern for reading and for your kind comments! I still cry when I read this, being reminded of those times when I went for the phone to tell Dad his granddaugher was engaged, making a wrong turn when out shopping to pop in and see him as was my custom when I was up that way, etc. The pain caused by the realization that he was not there was never stronger than at those times. My Mom passed away when we were young and I guess Dad became everything to us kids since then. More so than any of us realized at the time.

Thanks again everyone, I'm glad you liked it!

 Denise

 
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