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EnciNo
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since 2000-01-03
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0 posted 2000-01-05 11:53 AM


16

Life at 16

Pleasure and pain
Jumbled in a riot

Drink to death
Death to dorks

Mushy crushes
Passes

Radically
Emotionally
Repressed

Utterly alone
Black deathes

Fast cars
Slow dances

Roses and chocolates
Love and hate

Of smiles and stabs

Life at 16: confusing


(To Star - 01/16/89)


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Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
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state of confusion
1 posted 2000-01-05 12:01 PM


loved this!  Very tight writing style, concise and accurate of teen years!

Corinne

Denise
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2 posted 2000-01-05 12:01 PM


Yes, life can be confusing, at any age, but especially in the teen years. You have caputured the turmoil of those years well in this piece!

 Denise


hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 2000-01-05 01:53 PM


Oh, so true!!!
Felix
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 78
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4 posted 2000-01-05 02:37 PM


ok i saw this one in the list and thought...oh my gosh somebody is writing about my families favorite number!!! boy was i wrong...LOL. I remember life at 16 (wasn't too long ago for me). You described it very well. I like how this thing says so much yet in so few words.

 Did you ever read about a frog who dreamed of being a king, and then became one?

- Neil Diamond



Seaangel
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since 1999-07-27
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Auckland, New Zealand
5 posted 2000-01-05 03:53 PM


I hear that!!
Well done, EnciNo

RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
6 posted 2000-01-05 04:32 PM


I'm not sure if I can remember that far back but it sounds familiar...absolute total confusion!...hmmmmm, still seems the same now..

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


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