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Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
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Canyon Country, CA

0 posted 2000-01-05 05:21 AM


Why have you done this
even before I was born?
Have you now conscious
or even no scorn?

As I layed in your womb
and the days passed on by,
your only concern
was to get your next high!

The first time it hit me
my body shook with fear,
for little did I know
that danger lurked near.

The needle you sank
made you feel 'oh so fine,'
little did you think
I had crossed that same line.

To you it was heaven,
to me it was hell!
I couldn't reach out
or utter a yell.

I laid curled up tight
in a strange 'fitful sleep,'
while you kept on lying
with no promise to keep.

You left me alone
for myself to defend,
and pushed in the drugs
right into the end.

My hands are the size
of Daddy's little nail,
and you don't even think
you did anything to fail.

But God has got me
safe inside his arms!
When will you realize,
yes, your cocaine harms.

I am quite a fighter
and I'll see this through.
Now I am me,
but just who are you?

Before you can love me
and call me your own,
you must first love yourself
or face life alone!!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~

© Copyright 2000 Echo Rhayne - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 2000-01-05 05:31 AM


WOW!!!! Echo.....I'd like permission to print this out for use in our Healthy Begginings clinic. It's amazing how everyone see the picture so differently. This poem said a lot to me as I've seen the results drugs and alcohol as well as smoking can have on newborns.
A challange well met, thank you  

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
2 posted 2000-01-05 05:41 AM


LoL, I was just thinking the same thing, about how everyone see's the picture differently, but that might also be because I have seen this happen before and the picture brought back that time.  I have another poem that goes along with the picture, but that one I don't think I will post.  Thanks for the challenge!!!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste.  Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~

[This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 01-05-2000).]

RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
3 posted 2000-01-05 06:57 AM


Echo: This one is certainly a thinker, agree with Ruth...

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
4 posted 2000-01-05 07:32 AM


Very strong verse, Echo.  Powerful ending.  Such a tragic thing to see in life, too.  
Very well done.

Michael

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
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Ala bam a
5 posted 2000-01-05 08:16 AM


Good Job Echo....Well done!

Hoot....Why don't ya just take me to the healthy beginnings class? Then ya can show them the effects all those things have on folks even when they start at a much later age?......Sad shape this world's in yanno...

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2000-01-05 08:47 AM


Excellent! So sad though..I know this really happens but wish it didn't have to!  
suthern
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7 posted 2000-01-05 09:07 AM


This is powerful, Echo... Well done!
Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
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Southern Florida
8 posted 2000-01-05 09:19 AM


Yes, I agree with Suthern...this is very powerful and excellent writing Echo....
It's a real heartbreak to see these small ones fighting for thier lives..  < !signature-->

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
  Shannon


  


[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 01-05-2000).]

whiskey
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Australia
9 posted 2000-01-05 09:26 AM


Echo, Its so sad that people actually do this to their children , I wish children were safe from all of these things but sadly they dont have much say in it when the mother does such terrible things , Powerful message in your poem well done  
Denise
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10 posted 2000-01-05 10:26 AM


Very powerful, Echo. You can see the stronghold that addiction has in this.

 Denise


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