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whiskey
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0 posted 2000-01-05 02:25 AM


" Day dream "

Sky blue
Clouds white
Laying here
Under air
Seeing smile
Laughter heard
Birds fly
Over head
Sun shines
Warm skin
Glowing cheeks
Grass soft
Under skin
Heart sings
From within
Hair Bright
Face smooth
Soft lips
Upon mine
Given yours

© Copyright 2000 Julie Nelson - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 2000-01-05 02:30 AM


very very sweet, Whiskey - I like it!

K

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath

DreamEvil
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2 posted 2000-01-05 02:37 AM


Methinks this verse likes me. Tranquility strikes me in it.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)



highwayman
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3 posted 2000-01-05 02:45 AM


Whiskey,
   You know that I love you.  The poem is very good, but don't you think that the subject matter is a little to much for everyone here?  I look forward to you being able to show me were this place is!!

First__Knight
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4 posted 2000-01-05 02:51 AM


What a picture I see here.....wow  

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"



wayoutwalt
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5 posted 2000-01-05 02:54 AM


what are you trying to say highwayman!
whiskey
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6 posted 2000-01-05 03:05 AM


Thanks everyone for your kind replies  

Highwayman, I love you too your so clever for guessing the suject matter but then you know me well  

First__Knight
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7 posted 2000-01-05 03:12 AM


OKay as it has been pointed out to me my last comment looks a bit strange.....I mean is I see the picture from the Poem in the words......I was not refering to your personal picture Whiskey and Sorry for any misunderstanding that may have happened...LOL  But I would never be so bold anyway :0)

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"



whiskey
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8 posted 2000-01-05 03:25 AM


First Knight you got it all wrong I didnt take any offense to your reply there was nothing wrong with it  



[This message has been edited by whiskey (edited 01-05-2000).]

Denise
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9 posted 2000-01-05 10:45 AM


WOW! You do paint a lovely picture here! I absolutely love it!  


(p.s. I didn't misunderstand your first comment, First Knight)

 Denise


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