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simplyYRREHS
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0 posted 01-04-2000 10:14 PM       View Profile for simplyYRREHS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for simplyYRREHS

Still

Bittersweet
The memory
As down the path I trod

Begging thee
Deliver me!
Is all I ask of God

Trifiling
Deciphering
Of words so harshly spent

One askew
Mere thought of you
My pain seems infinate

Placidness
Emotionless
This being I've become

Heart is still
Against all will
It finally succombs


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1 posted 01-04-2000 10:18 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

Wonderful Sherry!!!!!  I loved it in all it's deepness towards GOD.  Am I right about that?


 


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2 posted 01-04-2000 11:05 PM       View Profile for simplyYRREHS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for simplyYRREHS

Bojopy...

Again, the "neat" thing about these writings-each seems to take on meaning relevent to the reader's needs...or interests.  I can see, how this could be interpreted as a deep thing about God, but actually, was not.  Don't get me wrong, there is mention of God in the poem, but simply as a plea for closure to a very painful memory.  I think I like my writing through your eyes- always nice to have a different view on how thoughts are perceived.

Thanks for the question and compliment!

Sherry
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3 posted 01-04-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for J.B.SR   Email J.B.SR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for J.B.SR

Sherry,i see that once again you have shown
another of your hidden talents.Im alaways amazed by the little things that i learn from and about you. Your friend Joel  

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Wonderful piece, Sherry!

 Denise

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The format you used with this worked very well in helping to display the emotions. Nicely done  
 
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