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Until I Flutter with Midnight
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Until I Flutter with Midnight |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Until I Flutter with Midnight Avalon, I dream you against the glitter of your past. I surrender to memory that floats, a seabird above unblemished landscape. I see the glorious gown and gloves sighing with summer’s passion when music pressed the walls and weeped across the water listening greenly darkly. Your crescendo spent my whisper on the portico embraced by kisses lost swept across the parterre like a ballerina the pastel flower of my dress rustles and I succumb to romance its splendid dance here in eloquent silhouette against the setting sun Close now I dip into the present to peek and find you wrinkled and cracked but through your windows the cobwebs could almost be the gauze of that dress holding the years holding your dear love that delicate bloom until I flutter with midnight. < !signature--> In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-04-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Comparing cobwebs with the gauze of the dress is excellent. May I ask which Avalon you are referring to? Great writing, as always. |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
Absolutely beautiful |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer: Avalon is a city on Catalina Island which is off the cost of Southern Calif. The dancing is from the Casino, a huge ballroom that hosted the big bands and romance of many years ago. < !signature--> In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-04-2000).] |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Stunning Martie.... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderful poem. I instantly saw Avalon in my memory... (even us Kansas boys get to travel occasionally) |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Brilliant work here Martie |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Yes, brilliant is a good word to describe your work, Martie Exquisite would be another Liz |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
How 'bout phenomenal for a word? You captured me and took me along with this beautiful piece. I am truly impressed.  *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I better get this in quick before I lose conciousness! WOW! You awesome writer... K'...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
So beautiful, Martie! Denise |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You paint the picture so well, hun, and yes- beautiful as always!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh my, you do write a mean free verse....well done once more!! Absolutely love the imagery in your works (I know, that must be the 50th time I've said that, but 'tis true ) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you so much you marvelous poets for reading and commenting on this poem. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
I keep stumbling over these great poems of yours I haven't read! This is so beautiful... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
For me - back in the 50's - it was the Crystal Beach Ballroom -and it was magic- all the girls were magical - and they knew it- all of us were handsome - and my feet were Fred Astaire's I loved it |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I thought I'd mosy down to open 5 and guess what I found.... this gem of a poem, written and polished beautifully by a Jewel named Martie You always leave me in awe Martie, Thank you. Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now I know....yes I do....why I want to write like you.... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I'm gonna start off with *hugging* Karilea's neck for bring this one back to the forefront- THEN ... I'm gonna oooooh and ahhhhhh over the sheer imagery this one brought to mind. Spinning me back to 19__ (Tee-Hee)  on the pier at Daytona Beach ... dancing my youth in the arms of my college sweetheart ! Oh, Frank S., where are you now ? What a wonderful and magical journey you've set my mind on .... BEAUTIFUL ... just beautiful ! ! Great BIG HUGS for this one. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Your crescendo spent my whisper on the portico embraced by kisses lost swept across the parterre like a ballerina the pastel flower of my dress rustles and I succumb to romance its splendid dance here in eloquent silhouette against the setting sun Close now I dip into the present to peek and find you wrinkled and cracked but through your windows the cobwebs could almost be the gauze of that dress holding the years holding your dear love that delicate bloom until I flutter with midnight. ================================ *sigh* ... nearly two years old...and as awesome as always... HAVE you ALWAYS wrote so amazing... ahhhh YEPPERS   *L*poetry baby...poetry.....we dont need no "stinkin fiction" but Im up for some Martie prose |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
stunning! |
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