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Until I Flutter with Midnight

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Martie
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Until I Flutter with Midnight

Avalon,
I dream you
against the glitter
of your past.

I surrender to memory
that floats,
a seabird above
unblemished landscape.
    
I see the glorious
gown and gloves
sighing
with summerís passion    
when music pressed the walls
and weeped across the water
listening greenly darkly.

Your crescendo spent my whisper
on the portico
embraced by kisses
lost
     swept
across the parterre like a ballerina
the pastel flower of my dress rustles
and I succumb to romance
its splendid dance here
in eloquent silhouette
against the setting sun

Close now I dip
into the present to peek
and find you wrinkled and cracked
but through your windows
the cobwebs could almost be the gauze
of that dress
holding the years
holding your dear love
that delicate bloom
until I flutter
with midnight.



†In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-04-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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Comparing cobwebs with the gauze of the dress is excellent. May I ask which Avalon you are referring to? Great writing, as always.
jaxjoy
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Absolutely beautiful
Martie
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Balladeer:  Avalon is a city on Catalina Island which is off the cost of Southern Calif.  The dancing is from the Casino, a huge ballroom that hosted the big bands and romance of many years ago.  

†In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-04-2000).]
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Stunning Martie....

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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5 posted 01-04-2000 09:54 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Wonderful poem.  I instantly saw Avalon in my memory...  (even us Kansas boys get to travel occasionally)
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Brilliant work here Martie

 


Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 01-04-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Yes, brilliant is a good word to describe your work, Martie
Exquisite would be another
Liz
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How 'bout phenomenal for a word?  You captured me and took me along with this beautiful piece.  I am truly impressed.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


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I better get this in quick before I lose conciousness!

WOW! You awesome writer...

K

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath
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10 posted 01-05-2000 12:59 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

So beautiful, Martie!

 Denise

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You paint the picture so well, hun, and yes- beautiful as always!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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Oh my, you do write a mean free verse....well done once more!! Absolutely love the imagery in your works (I know, that must be the 50th time I've said that, but 'tis true   )
Martie
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Thank you so much you marvelous poets for reading and commenting on this poem.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
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I keep stumbling over these great poems of yours I haven't read! This is so beautiful...
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For me - back in the 50's - it was the Crystal Beach Ballroom  -and it was magic- all the girls were magical - and they knew it- all of us were handsome - and my feet were Fred Astaire's I loved it
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I thought I'd mosy down to open 5 and guess what I found.... this gem of a poem, written and polished beautifully by a Jewel named Martie  

You always leave me in awe Martie, Thank you.

Maree

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and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"
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Now I know....yes I do....why I want to write like you....
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18 posted 03-16-2001 07:58 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
I'm gonna start off with *hugging* Karilea's neck for bring this one back to the forefront-

THEN ... I'm gonna oooooh and ahhhhhh over the sheer imagery this one brought to mind.

Spinning me back to 19__ (Tee-Hee)
on the pier at Daytona Beach ... dancing my youth in the arms of my college sweetheart !
Oh, Frank S., where are you now ?

What a wonderful and magical journey you've set my mind on ....
BEAUTIFUL ... just beautiful ! !

Great BIG HUGS for this one.
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Your crescendo spent my whisper
on the portico
embraced by kisses
lost
     swept
across the parterre like a ballerina
the pastel flower of my dress rustles
and I succumb to romance
its splendid dance here
in eloquent silhouette
against the setting sun

Close now I dip
into the present to peek
and find you wrinkled and cracked
but through your windows
the cobwebs could almost be the gauze
of that dress
holding the years
holding your dear love
that delicate bloom
until I flutter
with midnight.

================================
*sigh* ...
nearly two years old...and as awesome as always...
HAVE you ALWAYS wrote so amazing...
ahhhh YEPPERS     *L*
poetry baby...poetry.....we dont need no "stinkin fiction"  
but Im up for some Martie prose  
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stunning!
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