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Country Cookin'

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RobertB
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0 posted 01-04-2000 05:33 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RobertB

Country Cookin’

The screen door slammed shut
Not near fast enough
To keep out July or the flies
And sieved the humidity
Through the wire mesh-
A free flow exchange of gulf moisture
Mingling with aromas of Charlie’s cooking.


It didn’t close sufficiently tight
To keep Charlie’s mind confined
To the griddle or the fry pots-
The wood framed keeper couldn’t
Screen out the passion that resided in him.
To wander behind a bull tongue plow in fresh air
Instead of this grease mist
That coated his senses until the whole world
Smelled exactly like French-fries.


The café owned him in a cruel way


Robert


 if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
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Denise
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1 posted 01-04-2000 06:22 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is wonderful, Robert! That door can never close sufficiently enough to keep out our hopes and dreams! While we dream there is still hope!   (optimist's take)

Poor Charlie, stuck in that darn kitchen smellin' like grease, all hot and sweaty, a nowhere job, robbing him of his dreams. (pessimist's take).

Either way, great poem, Robert!  

 Denise

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 01-04-2000 06:26 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

RobertB,
Been there done that,enjoyed the poem.
RobertB
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3 posted 01-04-2000 10:15 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Thanks guys....(you are one of the guys to me Denise!) I think we all have been "there".

Ya know??

 if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
Marilyn
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4 posted 01-04-2000 10:41 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Oh this was great Robert! It is also good to see you...*giggle*. I have not been in open often enough.  
WhtDove
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Hey great one Robert! I see you have returned, or was it me?  Added your picture too, but where's the Harley?  miss ya!

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Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

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RobertB
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6 posted 01-05-2000 08:45 AM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Thanks Mar and 'Becca!! I took a few days off and relaxed! How are you guys????

See ya on ICQ!!
Toerag
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7 posted 01-05-2000 08:58 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Yep....a diner's dilemma....Well done Robert.....almost felt like I was in a Waffle house somewhere in Arkansas.....
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8 posted 01-05-2000 09:04 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This reminded me of a job I once had... what one will do to pay college tuition! LOL. The body may be trapped in boredom... but the mind is free to soar. Great job, Robert!
hoot_owl_rn
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Nice imagery Robert...BTW....who is that nice looking man  
devina
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This one had me remembering some years back when my first job was at good ole' Burger King !!(stop laughing you guys!)Good poem Robert!!

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RobertB
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11 posted 01-05-2000 05:52 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Burger King??? Remember Burger Chef??? LOL my first "real" job. I am glad this poem brought back memories. That is a compliment!

Ruth......ummmm the nice looking man?? Where?????

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Robert
Andrew Scott
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12 posted 01-05-2000 06:29 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

February 13, 1981 ~ wreaked the car... February 17, 1981 ~ got real first job... Bakers Better Burgers and Tacos of Sunnymead California. Worked the grill. I think every kid should work fast food so they know what they don't want to do for the rest of their lives.  
Sir Robert... always a good read and I do like your style. Slick pic' there too. Lookin' like you's the MAN!  
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Love this poem, Robert    It has ambience, it does.


I once worked at a little place called The
Golden Drumstick~~Fried chicken, hamburgers (NOT the frozen ones!)  and onion rings...and lots of grease! LOL  Had to wash my hair with Spic N Span to get it out!  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


RobertB
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14 posted 01-05-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Thanks!!! All the comments have me laughing!!

I wish that this poem had gone on and on about Charlie.

In my mind I had him starting at the diner at 16 during the depression when
his folks lost there farm. I envisioned him working for Old Man Gilmore then
"inheriting" the diner after the Old Man passed away. All the while hating
the diner because of what he lost...yet loving the it for what it saved him
from.

Oh well.....maybe someday I will tackle all these thoughts for this
poem........


Robert


Meadowmuse
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I agree...I wish it would have gone on and on about him too. Have you considered perhaps a short story? Or poem/novella? It's an intriguing glimpse...leaves the reader ready for the story.

Dear LadyClaire

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