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And You Sat Upon A Swing

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Local Rebel
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0 posted 01-04-2000 02:09 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Local Rebel

Across the southern sky
I've seen you dancing there
Brilliant in the sunlight
The radiance of your life shining
Casting long shadows on the parched fields

The sounds and smells of my childhood
Drifting back to me like dreams on a summer night
The creek rushing by on a humid day
A lonesome train whistle bellowing to the absent
The hymns played on an upright piano
Flowing out into the air
Through the windows of the old cinder block church
Where the old men sit sleeping
And the ladies are fanning their faces.

Children at play
A ball
And a bat
So much joy in the still air of the afternoon.

And you sat upon a swing.
Golden hair clinging to your glistening face.
And a smile as big as the sky,
In your eyes,
The universe.
I remember.

(Footnote:  I'm really not this prolific friends, I'm just posting some old peices here.  After I get these posted my work will come very sparsely.)

 How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius
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Toerag
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1 posted 01-04-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

I'm sure glad you mentioned the use of a "prophylactic" cuz this is....oh wait, you said prolific....never mind....LOL>..this is quite good Mr. Hawk.....I doubt seriously you'll run out of the "genius" you're referring to....
Dreamer_556
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2 posted 01-04-2000 02:23 PM       View Profile for Dreamer_556   Email Dreamer_556   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dreamer_556

A brilliant piece of work! I like the way you chose your words - very descriptive, which I think is fantastic.

~*Dreamer*~
suthern
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3 posted 01-04-2000 02:27 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Your work is worth waiting for Hawk... this is lovely!

Another nephew, hunh? *G*
Iloveit
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4 posted 01-04-2000 03:19 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

yep will ditto suthern on this one *g* lol...the descriptions you use so well allow the reader to *see* his or her own memories...excellent work my friend  
LngJhnAg
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5 posted 01-04-2000 03:23 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

hey, Hawk

I'm having a lot of trouble with your rhyming on this one.  I mean, "ball" doesn't rhyme with "bat" does it?  LOL - Just kidding.  This was a terrific piece of work - just like you, only better.
Meadowmuse
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6 posted 01-04-2000 04:20 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

This piece reads smoothly and easily...the poetic quality, to my way of thinking,  lies foremost in the suggestion of memory's influence. Very nicely done.

Dear LadyClaire

Denise
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7 posted 01-04-2000 05:02 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Fantastic memories! Wonderful poem!

 Denise

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8 posted 01-04-2000 05:13 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

ROFL@Toerag!!!!

Excellent images here on display. I, too, can look back and hear ball on bat and outdoor sounds.....but sometimes I wonder about today's kids. Will they look back and hear Nintendo games and computer keys? It's a different world.
Local Rebel
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9 posted 01-04-2000 05:29 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Thanks to my friends old and new.  And, yes, there is a finite volume here.  Back to werk I go!

 How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius
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10 posted 01-04-2000 06:25 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

How our memories weave their magic....love you LR, you are music to the soul!

HUSG

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

Local Rebel
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11 posted 01-04-2000 07:19 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Thanks RG!  You saved me with a song..

Oh deer,

Mario whumps and Soccer thumps... soccer my friend...
RainbowGirl
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12 posted 01-04-2000 07:28 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Sweetheart: Annie isn't a patch on you but you both have a haunting magic about you..Glad I was there, glad I'm here...for you!

HUSG



 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.



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Martie
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13 posted 01-04-2000 08:12 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This was tender and touched my heart.  Beautifully done!

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Marilyn
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14 posted 01-04-2000 08:57 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Beautiful piece this. My children will remember softball and soceer, hockey and skating. I adore the out of doors as do they. (I also can't afford the latest in high tech equipment...lol)

I am sorry that I have not read more of your work but I will remidy that as my time allows.
Nan
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15 posted 01-04-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

So you're not a bottomless pit, eh Reb..??
Hehe - That's the beauty of posting on a new board - You get to have a whole new audience for awhile - and you don't have to overwork, ya know??? - Nice one, btw.....
hoot_owl_rn
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16 posted 01-05-2000 12:38 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Excellent posting...I absolutely loved the feel of this one, not to mention your knack for great imagery  
Local Rebel
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17 posted 01-05-2000 09:16 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

No Nan... I have a bottom... some say it's cute!  ROFLMAO .. oops I think it's gone now.

Thanks everyone!

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whiskey
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18 posted 01-05-2000 09:20 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Wonderful poem , this is great  
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Sunshine
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PS is doing a whole lot of boosting...
which ultimately becomes
my pleasure.
 
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