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Now I See (Illusions Of Sincerity) (My First Poem)

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SownReality
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since 01-02-2000
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0 posted 01-04-2000 06:15 AM       View Profile for SownReality   Email SownReality   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit SownReality's Home Page   View IP for SownReality

Now I See

(Illusions Of Sincerity)

At First Sight
   Remarkable Beauty
   Thoughts Of Bliss
   Possible Passion

Intense Hormones Throughout
   Ultimate Confusion
   Searing Heat
   Shallow Embraces

Delivered Reality
   False Path To Ecstasy
   Plagiarized Introspection
   Open Doors Revealed As Closed

Spoken Words
   Denied Expressions
   Actions Justified With Ignorance
   Denial Of Betrayal

Premature Closure
   Trivial Acts To Hide Age Induced Insecurity
   Lost Tranquility Of Friendship
   Now I See It For What It Was
   Human Ignorance.


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SownReality
© Copyright 2000 Michael Lee Breyette - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 01-04-2000 06:50 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Sown Reality
This is really quite a nice poem... You'll be finding it moved over into the open forum before day's end no doubt - It'll get much more attention there.

Welcome to Passions - I'm looking forward to reading more of your work...
poetFemmeFatale
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2 posted 01-04-2000 07:37 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I too want to say a big Welcome!  Although mine is not as pretty as Nan's...     I like your name you chose too!  That's what initially caught my eye...
This poem of yours is quite interesting...I could feel intense happiness in the beginning, like you feel when you're in a brand new relationship - but then it went so sour, as some do...Great job using words to show the extreme emotion in this piece...made it very REAL....Hope to see more from you soon!  


 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 01-04-2000 11:28 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nice posting....welcome to passions  
Severn
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4 posted 01-05-2000 12:37 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Welcome, welcome...

    

Nice piece!

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath
Denise
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Welcome to Passions! Great poem, SownReality! I look forward to more from you!

 Denise

Toerag
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6 posted 01-05-2000 11:03 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Hey...this was quite interesting! And so much better than my first poem!!! Mine started with:

There's a girl named Nan from Nantucket,

You can pretty much figure where it went from there......welcome to PIP...
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