Now I See (Illusions Of Sincerity) (My First Poem)

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Now I See (Illusions Of Sincerity) (My First Poem)

SownReality
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since 2000-01-02

Posts 3
Southern CA, USA

0 posted 2000-01-04 06:15 AM

Now I See

(Illusions Of Sincerity)

At First Sight
   Remarkable Beauty
   Thoughts Of Bliss
   Possible Passion

Intense Hormones Throughout
   Ultimate Confusion
   Searing Heat
   Shallow Embraces

Delivered Reality
   False Path To Ecstasy
   Plagiarized Introspection
   Open Doors Revealed As Closed

Spoken Words
   Denied Expressions
   Actions Justified With Ignorance
   Denial Of Betrayal

Premature Closure
   Trivial Acts To Hide Age Induced Insecurity
   Lost Tranquility Of Friendship
   Now I See It For What It Was
   Human Ignorance.

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SownReality

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2000-01-04 06:50 AM

Sown Reality
This is really quite a nice poem... You'll be finding it moved over into the open forum before day's end no doubt - It'll get much more attention there.

Welcome to Passions - I'm looking forward to reading more of your work...

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

2 posted 2000-01-04 07:37 PM

I too want to say a big Welcome! Although mine is not as pretty as Nan's...

I like your name you chose too! That's what initially caught my eye...
This poem of yours is quite interesting...I could feel intense happiness in the beginning, like you feel when you're in a brand new relationship - but then it went so sour, as some do...Great job using words to show the extreme emotion in this piece...made it very REAL....Hope to see more from you soon!

** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 2000-01-04 11:28 PM

Nice posting....welcome to passions

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

4 posted 2000-01-05 12:37 PM

Welcome, welcome...

Nice piece!

'...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-01-05 10:59 AM

Welcome to Passions! Great poem, SownReality! I look forward to more from you!

Denise

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

6 posted 2000-01-05 11:03 AM

Hey...this was quite interesting! And so much better than my first poem!!! Mine started with:

There's a girl named Nan from Nantucket,

You can pretty much figure where it went from there......welcome to PIP...

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