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Moonshine
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0 posted 2000-01-04 09:01 AM


I scream into darkness,
The night swallows my words,
Noone can hear me,
Noone knows how much I hurt,
I need a safe place,
But all the doors are shut,
Not one will open for me,
Should I just give up?
And surrender myself over,
To the demons that haunt me,
Let them ravage my broken soul,
Then will they cease to torment me?

© Copyright 2000 Jen - All Rights Reserved
whiskey
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1 posted 2000-01-04 09:25 AM


Dont ever give up, Life has so many twists and turns focus on the good things  
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 2000-01-04 10:53 AM


Awwwwww Hon, you should never give up and as long as you have your passions family, you are never alone. Hang tight, things will look up.
Moonshine
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3 posted 2000-01-05 02:54 AM


Thanx for your reply Whiskey,
This was a poem I wrote last night - sometimes I just feel like that but I'm not giving up : )

Moonshine
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4 posted 2000-01-05 02:56 AM


Thanx Hoot,
Just feeling not so great right now, I'm OK though : )

First__Knight
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5 posted 2000-01-05 03:24 AM


Sometimes pulling on doors and looking for the safe place...is right there before us....and as we take time to see it.....the door pushes instead of pulling....and in we go.  Glad you pushed in this door and found us.....Thank you

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"



CrazyChick
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6 posted 2000-01-05 03:36 AM


i know how that feels   but you have to always move on....it would be worse if you didn't
great poem!!

Moonshine
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7 posted 2000-01-05 03:49 AM


Thanx for your comment F_N,
I'm glad that my friend showed me PIP and the great people who come here.

Moonshine
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8 posted 2000-01-05 03:52 AM


Thanx for your comment CrazyChick,
This poem is just how I feel sometimes. I'm OK : )

Deborah
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9 posted 2000-01-05 09:36 AM


You are never alone, there are always people who care.  Sometimes we all feel abandoned, but just remember the wonders in life.  Never give up.  
      Deborah

Moonshine
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10 posted 2000-01-05 09:12 PM


Thanx for your reply Deborah,
It's more a feeling than actually being alone - as I wrote to someone else in this forum: even in a sea of people it's easy to drown. I guess the poem is pretty metaphorical. It's just that something I feel every now and then and, I wrote about it. That's all.

Moonshine
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11 posted 2000-01-05 09:12 PM


Thanx for your reply Deborah,
It's more a feeling than actually being alone - as I wrote to someone else in this forum: even in a sea of people it's easy to drown. I guess the poem is pretty metaphorical. It's just that something I feel every now and then and, I wrote about it. That's all.

Dark Angel
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12 posted 2000-01-06 12:32 PM


Moonshine Honey, remember when I said not to feel alone, cause you're not on your own, I am here for you!! "hugs" Honey! Loved the poem.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Red
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13 posted 2000-01-06 12:35 PM


Speaking to my soul.lol  Beautiful poem... sad, but beautiful....remember, you're never really alone unless you make yousrself that way!!!
Moonshine
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14 posted 2000-01-06 01:09 AM


Thanx DA,

That means so much to me - you're an earth angel.

Moonshine
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15 posted 2000-01-06 01:11 AM


Thanx for your reply Red,
You speak words of truth.

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