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She was only seven
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She was only seven |
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neitham Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 42India |
She stood on the hard cold pavement. With tranquil sophisticated look. Cosseted with fear in all years. Mollify her pride with vain promises. She stood appraising the autumn heat. Vicks-scented air hung heavy all around. Wild desire she denies ever not. She waits to beguile more cursed lovers. She stares with cloudy mystic eye. Her once ripe body battered by age. She now sleeps with vanity lullaby. When alone shattered dreams hug her. She stoodstill as like a statue. Hard and Cold her body, her soul. Fate had chosen her long ago. She was only 7 when she was abandon. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Wonderful blank verse this is and with a poignant message as well. This likes me much it does. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
So sad , but a wonderful poem  |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Very sad..  Is it factual?HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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neitham Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 42India |
Hi guys, Thanks and it is a sad poem. RG, no its not factual....this poem developed from my feelings for the downtrodden sex workers.. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Very sad indeed! Well written. <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree, very sad and very well done! Denise |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
neitham: Thanks for answering the question and yes, it's sorrowful to see an adult's expressions in the eyes of one so young.. HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I am so glad I didn't miss this one...wonderfully stated...wow!! |
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Dreamer_556 Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 34 |
As everyone says, very sad, but beautifully written. ~*Dreamer*~ |
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