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His Needy Love |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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You didn't deserve my tears tonight, yet I gave them to you willingly. My heart poured like rainwater, onto the surface of my skin. Drop after bitter drop of me, and not once did you relent. Yes I loved- I gave too much, I now lay an empty pool- drained thouroughly by you, and your needy love. You don't deserve a second chance- to fill this pool to forgiveness. You need only to move on- to a new pool in need of drainage. Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Really like this, sad, but wiser. Now I hope your filling up your pool again for someone who deserves it. |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
EXCELLENT! I can feel things healing already for you, It's amazing how writing something like that down can release so much. Paul P.S. Thanks for all your comments !! |
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John Foulstone Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 100Australia |
Hi, Devina. Moving and wellsaid. I trust you did't give this cad a second chance! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Sept- thank you, but I think it might take more than three months to get over a four year engagement...maybe someday I'll meet the right one!  Paul- I'm starting to feel more alive on my own than I've ever felt while with him. thank you for your comments hun, always much appreciated! John-First let me welcome you to passions! Secondly I'd like to say no, sometimes it better to leave well enough alone instead of trying to fix all the problems and start over. Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
devina, I do so hope you find that 'right one' you deserve it, and whoever it is better darn well love your poems, I know I do! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
The deeper sorrow carves into our soul the more joy we may contain... Very nice expression of a universal human concern! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
You made me feel this piece Devina!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful poem. I, too, 'felt' it! Denise |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great poem Devina! You really know how to express your feelings well. Keep up the good work. Hey Devina I have some pieces to help you with your Guardian Angel poem. He's my inspiration, my strength. His love for me, extends to the greatest lengths. He makes sure I'm happy and safe. He's always on time and he's never late. Those words are use to use and you can flip it any kind of way you want. Set your poem up like mine and combine some of your own ideas. You can even use some of my words from my poem if you need to. I tried but, it's a little hard to do a manly version as compared to a female version. Nathan |
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EnciNo Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 12 |
you express your feelings vividly. liked the poem very much. hope you feel better. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Echo- Thank you so much sweetie, and believe me yours are just as appreciated! LR- I guess I have quite a bit of joy stored up then huh? Shannon & Denise- Thank you both for knowing how I feel! Nathan- You are so very charming sir!, I guess I'll have to start that poem huh? Thanks for your words, I'll see what I can do with them! Thanks again sweetie! EnciNo-Glad you enjoyed the read! Thanks for your concern! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hi divina, An excellent portrayal of someone that was emotionally unavailable for you. A lesson I am learning is we can't make someone love us we can only let them love us. I hope you find someone who will be a good friend for you and one that wants to give and receive Love. James |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You know, it took me four years to realize this, and the hard part is that my ex finally realized how much attention I need- once it was too late  ...thank you for your kind words, hun, you did make me smile!!Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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