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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2000-01-03 11:24 PM


Once I get more time, I'll get to commenting on other poetry, because I realize that posting your own is only half of it, if not less. But until then, here's a poem I wrote on lunch break today.

-stay inside the lines, girl-
Slow fingers of isolation
Clamp in fists of recognition,
Pounding against the mind's expansion
Feeling lost resolution.

Eyes are empty with confusion,
Feeling dully the contusion
Caused by life's retribution --
What you thought was revolution.

But was it, really? Really, was it?
It was, really? Really, it was?

Words are unsolvable solutions,
Definition refutations
Of what you passed as permutations
For the truth --
Like that would save us?



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Severn
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1 posted 2000-01-04 03:53 AM


Interesting work here - trying to capture the link betwwen the lost revolution and words - I would love it if you could explain it to me! Oh - and thanks for the gracious explanation at the top - many will appreciate that.



 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara

bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-05-22 07:14 PM


Severn, just a bunch of awful sludge from my angst-o-tron phase. Yikes!

But glad y' liked the idea of it, anyway.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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