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Master
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since 1999-08-18
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Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-01-03 11:03 PM


I yearn to write and yet my hand does shake,
I cannot capture what I felt on paper.
Your lips mixed with the fountain water make
Great Expectations seem much greater!


We stood above The Twins, as though two giants,
And mocked the golden bull without a fear,
Believing there was nothing real in science
We held on tight to what we felt was dear.

The time flew quickly on the Cupid’s wings
And caught us while we too, were flying.
That heart is strongest which forever sings,
And love grows greater, not afraid of dying.

A mirror shattered like a broken heart
Reflections scattered, but not one did part.


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 I fell in love and kept on falling





[This message has been edited by Master (edited 01-05-2000).]

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Denise
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1 posted 2000-01-03 11:39 PM


Beautiful, Master! And, like you, I also yearn to write, only difference is....you have! (maybe tomorrow...)

 Denise


Paul Hoekman
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since 1999-12-28
Posts 382
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2 posted 2000-01-04 01:10 AM


Thanks Master I really enjoyed the way this came together, Beautiful!
Reminds me of one I have'nt posted yet,
better get on it. The title that is.
             Paul

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
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Missouri
3 posted 2000-01-04 01:12 AM


Beautiful, I love those last two lines.
Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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Pennsylvania
4 posted 2000-01-04 01:14 AM


Wow, I liked this. This person has definitely been in love
Liz

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 2000-01-04 01:26 AM


Yes!!! Powerful and moving piece. Well done  
Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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6 posted 2000-01-04 03:02 AM


Very strong words here.

I like!



 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara

Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
7 posted 2000-01-04 09:47 PM


Thank you everyone, some of the things in this one are very personal so don't try to make sense out of it. Thank you for responding!
Bojopy
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

8 posted 2000-01-04 09:52 PM


WOW!!!!!! those last two lines were extremely good.....dont get me wrong the rest was good too.....overall a great poem......thanks for the read..........Bojopy

 



Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
9 posted 2000-01-05 05:01 PM


Thank you Bojopy! glad you liked it!
Seaangel
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand
10 posted 2000-01-05 05:09 PM


lovely, my Master...(LOL) memories always hold, don't they?
Deborah
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 41

11 posted 2000-01-05 06:20 PM


Beautiful poem, captured some deep feelings.
    Deborah

caroline
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since 1999-08-16
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12 posted 2000-01-05 06:23 PM


hmmm...perhaps you should include more of the personal in your writing, then.  Love this, it is excellent  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



Kid Pedestal
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since 2000-01-04
Posts 26
Chandler, Arizona
13 posted 2000-01-05 07:27 PM


In the wake of this piece, I am but speechless.

Kid Pedestal




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Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
14 posted 2000-01-05 09:26 PM


LOL Seaangel, another servant added to my collection!

Caroline, glad you liked it, I wasn't sure how people were going to respond to this one!

Thank you everyone for your comments!

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